Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
With the growing trend of globalization, more tourists from all over the world are spending their vacations in Vietnam. This has led some people to thinkThis has led to some thinking that this trend has a overall negative impactnegative impact overall. I strongly disagree with this idea, thinking that international traveltraveling is beneficial to the countries visited.
I disagree with the statement because international travel fostersinternational travels foster the tourism industry of Vietnam. For example, atfor many tourist attractions, local people rely heavily on tourism to make atheir living. Foreign tourists typically spend moreare typically more generous as they spend more on food, souvenirs, and activities like canoeing or zip-lining. Another reason why I disagree is that, because of foreign travelers, more effort is made to restore Vietnamese culturemore restoration of Vietnamese culture gets carried out. Foreign tourists are more interested in traditional festivals, clothes, and buildings than domestic touristsones. By encouraging foreigners to visit Vietnam, we have an incentivehave the incentives to preserve our traditions, especially when foreigners appreciate them.
However, I can understand why some people have a negative attitude towards foreign tourists. The first reason is that foreigners can sometimes show little respectsometimes can have little respect for the environment of the countries they visitthe country they traveled to. It can be seen, usually, after vacations, that visitors from some countries would typically litter all over the beaches, like Vung Tau or Nha Trang. The second reason is that the greater the influx of international tourists, the less domestic tourists can enjoy themselves. For example, Hoi An is always packed with tourists from South Korea and China all year round, making it extremely difficult for domestic tourists to enjoy activities thereenjoy any activities here. This problem is considered a trade-off between prioritizing international and domestic touriststhe tradeoff between prioritizing international or domestic tourists.
In conclusion, I do agree that international travelers can cause problems for the countries they visit. However, I still strongly disagree with this statement because the benefits to the tourism industry cannot be ignored.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The essay presents a clear position, develops both benefits and drawbacks with concrete examples, and moves logically through the argument. Its main limitation is that several claims and examples rely on broad generalisations, while occasional awkward phrasing reduces precision. The highest-priority improvement is to deepen the evaluation of why the benefits outweigh the acknowledged harms and express those comparisons more precisely.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear disagreement is maintained and supported with relevant, developed reasons while opposing concerns are also addressed.
Make the final judgement more persuasive by explicitly weighing the identified benefits against the environmental and crowding problems.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas are logically sequenced in well-focused paragraphs, with generally effective cohesive control throughout.
Use less formulaic signposting and create smoother links between examples and the claims they support.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of topic-specific vocabulary, though several collocations and comparisons are awkward or imprecise.
Refine expressions such as 'international travel', 'cultural restoration', and 'fewer domestic tourists' for greater accuracy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied complex sentences are used with good control, although minor errors in number, tense, comparison, and adverb placement remain.
Proofread complex sentences for plural forms, comparative structures, and consistent tense before finalising the response.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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