Wild animals have no use in the 21 st century and trying to preserve animals now is just a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
The natural habitats of wild animals and their way of life have been greatly affected by human activities, and in my opinion, we should try to take every possible steptake and initiate every possible step to save these wild animals. So, I disagree that wild animals serve no purposeanimals in the wild serve us no purpose in modern times and that tryingmodern times and trying to save them is a waste of money and resources. This essay explains why.
The 21st century does not mean that we have to interfere with naturealter the way of nature and destroy the planet. These wild animalsThe lives of these wild animals have been endangered by human activitybecause of humans and some species are on the verge of extinction. If necessary steps are not taken immediately, many of these species will be lost forever. Humans need wildthose animals to protectpreserve nature and save the planet.
To keep the balance of the ecosystem, each animal specieseach species of the animal kingdom plays an important roleplays important roles and the existence of one species largely depends on another. To say that wild animalsanimal have no use for us is a self-centred claimis just a selfish statement and, obviously,and obviously, we should try to keep the natural balance for our own benefit. For example, many wild animals control rat populationskill lots of rats and save farmers' cropsthe farmers' crops from being eaten or destroyed by ratsby those rats. So if we kill those animals, we will suffer the consequenceswe will have to suffer.
In conclusion, we must try to preserve all the endangered and natural animals and as humans, we should feel responsible to ourselves not to let any species be lost forever. Those wild animals maintain biodiversity and help us live in a perfectly balanced world.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response maintains a clear disagreement and uses ecosystem balance plus a relevant crop-protection example to support its position. Its main limitation is that the first body paragraph remains general and partly repeats the need for preservation rather than explaining resource value in depth, while several awkward phrases weaken precision. The highest-priority improvement is to develop a distinct, specific reason in each paragraph and refine collocations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is clear throughout and supported by relevant ecological reasoning, though one body paragraph is general and only partly developed.
Give each body paragraph a distinct reason and explain precisely how it proves that preservation justifies its resources.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a clear introduction-body-conclusion sequence, and ideas progress logically with generally effective linking.
Strengthen progression by making the first body paragraph develop a separate point rather than repeating the overall position.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient topic vocabulary to discuss habitats, extinction, ecosystems, and biodiversity, but several collocations and word choices are awkward.
Use more natural phrases for conservation responsibility and ecological relationships, and check singular-plural word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied sentence structures with mostly clear meaning, although agreement, article, and noun-form errors appear several times.
Check agreement within long sentences and revise plural forms and articles before finalizing the response.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Wild animals have no use in the 21 st century and trying to preserve animals now is just a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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