Why do you think people attend college or university?
Sample Response
Many people attend universityMany people attend to university or collegecollage after their high school years for several reasonsreason which they choose by themselvesthem self. I believe that the most common reason why people attend to university or collage to have new experiences on life, to prepare for a career, and to increase their knowledge of their personality.
FirstSecondly, many people go to university or collegecollage to prepare for a career. Career training is becoming more important nowadays to young people compared to old people. At college, students learn many career-related skillsskills for their career and they intern to internship with a lot of chances. These skills and internship opportunitiesAll of these things prepare them for employmentprepare them for their career.
In addition, studentsAlso, students attend university or college to increase their understanding of themselves and lifeself-knowledge of their personality on life. They attend in order to increaseThey attend for that to increase their knowledge ofin subjects which they find interesting. For example, many students study science because they are interestediinterest in science but they work in the business sectorwork on the business area.
To sum up, I think people should not focus only on a careernot only focus on a career when they go to university or college. They have to follow to have new experience and knowledge about their personality and the great world around them which they live in.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response has a recognisable structure and identifies several relevant reasons for attending university, especially career preparation and intellectual interest. However, it is substantially under length, one promised reason is not developed, and the explanations are brief or unclear. The highest priority is to add a fully developed paragraph for each distinct reason, using precise explanation and a relevant example while avoiding repetition.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Several relevant reasons are identified, but the under-length response develops them only briefly and omits meaningful treatment of new experiences.
Explain each listed reason in its own paragraph with a clear cause, consequence, and concrete example, while meeting the required length.
Coherence and Cohesion
Basic paragraphing and a clear overall direction are present, although progression is mechanical and some links between ideas are unclear.
Use a consistent sequence of focused body paragraphs and make each sentence extend the central reason rather than repeat it.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary communicates the main ideas, but repetition, spelling mistakes, and frequent unnatural word combinations limit precision.
Replace repeated general nouns with accurate topic vocabulary and proofread forms such as college, interested, and themselves.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and some complex sentences are attempted, but frequent errors in verbs, agreement, plurals, and prepositions reduce control.
Build complete subject-verb clauses first, then check every sentence for agreement, verb form, and necessary articles or prepositions.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Why do you think people attend college or university?
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.