The only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Road accidents have always been a significant concerna significant matter of concern, so much so that some people argue thatthere is an idea that says the problem can only be solved by punishing trafficdriving offenders very strictly. However, I do not think this is the only solution, although it could be somewhat effective.
On the one hand, it could be helpful to impose severe penaltiesapply serious penalties to reduce the risk of traffic accidents. Theoretically, this not only can prevent lawbreakers from driving recklesslythoughtlessly again but also can deter others from doing sowarn other people against doing that. For example, since 2019, when Vietnam introduced strict drink-driving lawslaid down strict legislation on alcohol consumption control, the number of alcohol-related crashescrashes caused by drunkenness has decreased. According to this law, drivers will receive a fine of at least 85 USD for motorcycles and 255 USD for cars if their blood or breath contains alcohol, besides having their driving licence confiscated.
On the other hand, the above-mentioned solution is not always successful; hencesuccessful, hence an alternate measure should be proposed. Research conducted in Queensland, Australia, in 2019 shows that traffic infringements did not decrease despite the imposition of serious penalties, suggesting that people’s aggressive driving was not successfully deterredaggressive driving habits were not successfully deterred. Therefore, another measure is needed, and from my perspective, we ought to think about banning private vehicles, at least in a number of areas. This not only contributes to the reduction of the risk of road accidentsroad accident risks but also helps to ease environmental problems.
In brief, imposing strict punishments on driving offences could be helpful, but only to a certain extent. Since this method cannot eliminatedefeat reckless driving, another proposal ought to be made, such as prohibiting personal vehicles.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response’s strongest feature is its clear, consistent position, supported by relevant examples showing both the potential and the limits of stricter penalties. Its main limitation is that the proposed alternative of banning private vehicles is asserted more than fully developed and is somewhat broader than the safety issue. The highest-priority improvement is to explain how a realistic complementary measure would reduce accidents and link it more directly to the central argument.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response directly addresses the claim, maintains a clear partial-disagreement position, and develops both punishment and an alternative with relevant support.
Develop the alternative measure more fully by explaining its practical scope and its direct effect on road safety.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through a clear introduction, two focused body paragraphs, and a consistent conclusion, with generally effective linking.
Use less formulaic transitions and make the shift from the limits of punishment to the alternative measure more organically connected.
Lexical Resource
A sufficiently wide vocabulary conveys the argument precisely overall, although several collocations such as “defeat reckless driving” sound unnatural.
Refine collocational accuracy by choosing natural combinations such as “deter reckless driving” and “traffic offenders.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good range of complex structures is used with generally strong control, and the few awkward constructions do not impede meaning.
Improve word order and clause punctuation in structures such as “not only can prevent” and sentences joined with “hence.”
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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