Some people believe that a college or university education should be available to all students. Others believe that higher education should be available only to good students. Discuss these views. Which view do you agree with?
Sample Response
People learn throughout their livesthrough their entire lives. They constantly improve their knowledge and develop personallyknowledge and develop. I think that a college or university education should be available to all students because everyone has the rightbecause every person has the right to choose the path to self-improvementway to self-perfection. BelowBellow I will give my reasonssome of my reasons to support my position.
First of all, every person should have the chance to earnget a higher degree, gain new knowledge and experience. However, some people believe that higher education should be available only to good students. I think this restriction is unreasonableit is silly. It is like to make unavailable traveling for one who does not have IQ high enough.
Second of all, some young people do not do well at school but they have strong personal qualities and the abilitygreat personality and ability to learn. They are self-confident, persistent and patient. With these qualities they can get higher grades thanthen their classmates who are talented but lazy. Imagine for example situation when a teenager gets high grades because his or her parents constantly make him or her study and help themto do most of the homework. In this case a child does very wellgood at school but I think the same student may perform very differently at collegea college can show the opposite results.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response has a clear position and offers a relevant example about school performance, but it is substantially under length and does not genuinely discuss the case for restricting higher education to good students. The argument also ends without a conclusion. The priority is to develop both views fairly, support each with distinct reasoning, and finish with a concise conclusion reaffirming the position.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear opinion is presented, but one required view is barely examined and the short, unfinished response limits idea development.
Explain the strongest reason for restricting access as well as the case for universal access, then weigh them in a conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas are separated into paragraphs and broadly follow the stated position, though progression is basic and the response stops abruptly.
Use a complete four-paragraph structure with clearer logical links between each claim, example, and implication.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary conveys the main ideas but includes several spelling errors and inaccurate or awkward combinations.
Use precise academic wording and proofread expressions such as comparisons, educational achievement, and access to travel or study.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and some complex sentences are understandable, but frequent article, preposition, comparison, and word-form errors reduce control.
Review article use, comparative forms, and clause construction, then edit each sentence for a complete and natural grammatical pattern.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people believe that a college or university education should be available to all students. Others believe that higher education should be available only to good students. Discuss these views. Which view do you agree with?
Your response
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