University education should be restricted to the very best academic students, rather than being available to a large proportion of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
At the entrance university examination, the prospective students’ application mainly selected based on their overall academic performance at high school. It is argued that higher education should be provided onlyhigher education only provided to young peoplethe youngsters who have outstanding academic performancean outstanding academic performance. As a result, only a low percentageonly low percentage of young peoplegeneration can attend university. I believeIn my opinion, I believe that it should be accessible to everyone. The term of outstanding academic performer can lead to an unjust judgmentinjustice judgement. Genetic factorsfactor plays an important role in developing a smart person. But this factor is not enough. In fact, intelligence is affected by many factors that are strongly relatedwhich strongly related to how much money you invest. These can rangeThis can be ranged from simple to complicated things. The brain needsBrain needs nutritious foods as well as supplements to develop well from the fetal stage onwardeven since we are at our fetus stage. Thus, we obviously have to increase our budget to fulfill these kinds of needsthis kind of needs. AnotherOther factor is the education facilities that we can afford such as schools, tutors, and books. Its price often followed by its quality. The more we pay, the more we are likely to obtain higher qualityget high quality. All of this can only be afforded by wealthy peopleby the richs. People on low incomes experienceThe poors experience difficulty in providing nutritious foodproviding the nutritious foods and education facilities for their children. As a consequence, the group which comprisescomprises of very best students at school often belong to the richs. However, nowadays many scholarships are available for the poors. They can successfully graduated. In fact, there are many cases that their life a way much better if they have their university degree. When the restriction is imposed, they don’t have the equal right to pursue their degree in tertiary education. Education is a long-term investment for the future of a nation. Its benefits are going back to the whole society. By giving an equal chance, there will be more population that hold their university degree. Each person give their best effort because they have a skill in particular area which they had acquired in university. They can be seen as the country’s assets to improve the quality of its human resources and, moreover, accelerate its economic development. To sum up, I completely disagree that the university is merely an exclusive place for those who marked as an outstanding student. However, everyone is capable in pursuing their degree. Therefore, higher education should be provided for all.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear disagreement with restricting university access and offers relevant arguments about socioeconomic inequality and education’s wider social value. Its main limitation is that several claims are overgeneralised or only loosely connected, while frequent grammatical errors make the reasoning less precise. Focus first on building each main argument through a clear claim, explanation, and realistic example, then edit sentence forms carefully.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is sustained and supported with relevant ideas about unequal opportunity and national benefit, though development is sometimes broad or speculative.
Support each main reason with a focused explanation and a concrete example that directly proves why broad university access is preferable.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a generally logical path, but some connections between nutrition, wealth, scholarships, and access are loose or repetitive.
Separate the inequality and societal-benefit arguments into distinct paragraphs with clearer internal progression from claim to consequence.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient vocabulary to discuss education and inequality, but inaccurate collocations and word forms frequently reduce naturalness.
Use precise academic expressions for social groups and educational access, and check word forms before adding ambitious vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied sentence structures, but frequent errors in articles, agreement, verb forms, and clause construction reduce control.
Prioritise complete clause patterns and systematically correct subject-verb agreement, articles, and participle forms during revision.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
University education should be restricted to the very best academic students, rather than being available to a large proportion of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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