Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Awareness of healthy eatingThe consciousness of eating healthy and staying fit is rapidly increasing among young people, adults, and even older peoplebetween the youth, adults, and even the elderly. The practicesource of consuming a high fiber diet containing high amountsinclusive of rich amounts of vitamins and proteins has gained popularity recentlyin the recent past. Some peoplePeople believe that the only way to eat a healthy diet is to consume a diet that doesn’t include meat, and everyone should completely adopt a vegetarian diet to stay healthy. I totally disagree with the above-given statement.
Agriculture in India expanded rapidlyAgriculture in India observed a sudden rise with the advent of the Green Revolution after independence. The Revolution introduced farmers to new technologiesintroduced farmers with new technology like the use of high yield variety seeds, chemical fertilisers, manures, pesticides and insecticidesChemical Fertilizers, and Manures, Pesticides, and insecticides. The crops grown today are less organic than in the pastless organic compared to the past. Previously farmers were only dependent on natural resources for the production of crops, but due to the commercialization of agriculture, a lot of chemicals are added to the seeds, which makemakes them harmful and unfit to consume.
Consumption of pulsespulse was considered the best source of proteinsource of acquiring proteins essential for the human body. The advent of Chemical Fertilizers not only made them harmful to use but also has caused a sudden increase in diseases like Diabetes, Gall Bladder Stone, and deadly cancer. People have become more aware and have adoptedPeople are becoming more aware and have adopted organic farming in their privateconfined gardens to be less dependent on market products.
The diet we consume todayThe diet today which we consume is less likely to be pure and contains more man-injected proteins. The Doctors themselves suggest eating and adoptingadopt eggs and boiled chicken in the diet as a source of rich protein diet. People are more inclined towards exercise to stay fit for this, and they are advised to reduce their consumption of carbohydrates and substitute their meals with protein-rich resources. However, one cannot completely become a vegetarian or a non-vegetarian. It is always a mix of both worlds to fill the stomach.
To conclude, meat cannot be completely discouraged in the diets, as it is the only pure source having fewer chemicals in it.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response maintains a clear position and uses a recognizable essay structure, so its main line of argument is easy to identify. However, most support focuses narrowly on chemicals in crops and makes unsupported health claims, leaving the case against compulsory vegetarianism only partly developed. The priority is to build two directly relevant reasons with credible explanations or examples showing why meat can form part of a healthy diet.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear disagreement is maintained, but the supporting ideas are narrow, partly tangential, and often asserted without convincing explanation.
Develop two distinct, directly relevant reasons against universal vegetarianism and support each with a realistic example or causal explanation.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing and basic progression are clear, although links between agricultural history, food purity, and the conclusion are sometimes loose.
Give each body paragraph one explicit claim and ensure every following sentence develops that claim before moving to the next idea.
Lexical Resource
The response shows an adequate range of topic vocabulary, but inaccurate collocations and word choices frequently reduce precision.
Use more natural combinations such as 'a high-fibre diet,' 'adopt a diet,' and 'a source of protein,' while avoiding exaggerated scientific wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures conveys the main meaning, but recurring article, agreement, capitalization, and verb-form errors weaken control.
Proofread systematically for articles, subject-verb agreement, and parallel verb forms, especially in longer sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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