Watching television is bad for children. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Sample Response
Some parents believe that watching television is bad for their children. ThereforeSo, they try to restrict their children from watching TV. However, other parents think that there is nothing bad in watching TV. Personally, I think that watching TV brings children only benefits unless they spend in front of TV set less then a couple of hours daily. For the following reasons, which I will mention belowbellow, I believe that television plays an essential role in a child's developmentin child's development.
First of all, television helps a child to expandextent his or her range of interests. Children can find out many new things and make many exiting discoveries for themselves. In addition to these practical benefits television improves children's vocabulary, their memory and gives them the opportunity to gain more knowledge. I think it is essentialvery essential for a child. Of coursecause, someone can say that there are plenty of different sourcesrecourses of information such as books and teachers. However, I thinkBut, I think, in our modern world children must learn faster and use all contemporary technologiestechnology in order to succeed.
Second of all, watching cognitive programs helps children to learn more about wild life, our environment and about the importance of preserving our forestsforest and wild animals that live there.
Scientists say that a child should not watch TV more thanthen 40 minutes continuouslysuccessively. For example, my mother always made us takehave a break after watching TV more thanthen half an hour and let our eyes rest for several minutes before turning on the TV again. I think it is the best solution.
To sum up, I believe that television gives children and people in generalchildren and all people the opportunity to learn what cannot be learnedcan not be learn from books. Television and movies in particular allow people to experience realityfeel the reality and see what they will most likely not be able to see in their lives. Personally, when I was a child I liked to watch cognitive programs about wild animals. Unfortunately, my family had only one TV, but these programs were the only ones we all wanted to watch. So, we gathered in our living room and watched them in complete silence and I always remember those moments with a smile on my face.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear pro-television position and supplies several relevant benefits, including vocabulary growth and environmental learning. Its main limitation is that development is uneven: some claims are asserted briefly, the time-limit discussion only loosely supports the position, and the final anecdote is longer than its analytical value. Prioritise clearer cause-and-effect explanation for two central reasons and ensure the qualification about viewing time is stated logically.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A relevant position is maintained and supported with several reasons, although some ideas are only briefly developed or loosely focused.
Build two central benefits through explicit explanation and relevant examples, and clarify how limited viewing time qualifies the position.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses through recognisable stages and uses paragraphs, but some paragraphing is unbalanced and linking is occasionally mechanical.
Group each main reason with its supporting explanation in one developed paragraph and use transitions that express the precise logical relationship.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for the topic and includes some less common terms, but frequent spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision.
Check commonly confused forms and collocations, especially words such as than, below, extend, exciting, resources, and educational programmes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures conveys the message clearly, though recurring article, agreement, and verb-form errors weaken accuracy.
Proofread complex sentences for articles, noun forms, comparison structures, and passive verb forms before finalising the response.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Watching television is bad for children. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.