Some people say that too much attention and too many resources are given to protect wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
It is often argued that protecting wild animals and birds receives disproportionate attention and resources compared to pressing human needs. While I understand that investing in wildlife conservation is necessary and beneficial, it is also important to ensure that this conservation workthis effort does not overshadow other urgent human needs.
Protecting wild animals and birds is a necessary investment that benefits both nature and humanitynecessary investment for both nature and humanity. One reason is that preserving biodiversity is essential for maintaining ecological balance and environmental health. Each species, no matter how small, contributes to the stability of ecosystems through its specific roleby playing a specific role in natural processes. As a result, protecting wildlife helps to sustain clean air, fresh water, fertile soil, and interconnected food chains on which humans also relyfood chains that humans also rely on. A further consideration is thatAnother important point is that conservation is both a moral responsibility and a source of long-term benefitsreflects both a moral responsibility and a long-term benefit to future generations. By actively preserving endangered species, we ensure that the natural world remains protectedintact and accessible for those who come after us. Therefore, environmental care is not just a matter of ethics, but also a step toward a more sustainable future.
However, other urgent needs also warrant attention and fundingother urgent needs deserve more focus and funding. A major concernThe first notable concern is that social prioritiessectors such as education, healthcare, and poverty alleviation are often underfunded. These areas directly affect human well-being and development, yet they may receive less attention when resources are heavily directed toward wildlife protection. Excessive focus on animal conservation can therefore limittherefore can limit the support available for essential public services. Another issue is the potential inefficiency of some conservation projects. In certain cases, large sums of money are spent on protecting rare species that have minimal ecological impact. When this occurs, the spending may be viewed as symbolic rather than effectivefunds may be viewed as symbolic rather than practical, producing little real-world benefit and leading to a misuse of limited resources.
In conclusion, although I believe that protecting wild animals and birds is a valuable and morally sound goal, it is also important to strike a balance by allocating resources judiciously across social and environmental priorities. By doing so, we can ensure that conservation efforts complement—rather than compete with—human development goals.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response is strongest in its balanced, well-organised development of both the ecological case for conservation and the competing claims of essential public services. Its main limitation is that some supporting claims, especially the suggestion that rare species may have little ecological value, are broad and insufficiently qualified; the highest-priority improvement is to use a more concrete, carefully framed example to substantiate the resource-allocation argument.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear, nuanced position is maintained and both sides of the resource-allocation issue are developed with relevant reasoning.
Strengthen the argument about inefficient conservation spending with a specific, credible example and more careful qualification.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through a clear introduction, two focused body paragraphs, and a conclusion that consistently reflects the argument.
Make the internal transitions slightly less formulaic so the supporting points connect more organically.
Lexical Resource
A wide and precise vocabulary supports sophisticated discussion of ecological, ethical, and social priorities with strong control.
Refine broad phrases such as minimal ecological impact to express contentious claims with greater precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A broad range of complex structures is used accurately, with clear control of clauses, punctuation, and agreement.
Continue refining sentence rhythm by varying the placement and form of longer subordinate structures.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that too much attention and too many resources are given to protect wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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