Some people work harder than other. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative habit?
Sample Response
Some people work harder than others. In my opinion, this is due to natural differences in temperament and it is largely a positive characteristic, though there are exceptions.
The main motivating factor behind disparities in work ethic is character. The extent to which this is genetic or imbued by parents and other influences during childhood is in debate. There can be little doubt, however, that some are born with a proclivitya natural proclivity to focus and the willpower to push themselves to completeaccomplish their work. Well known examples of this abound in the biographies of great men. Naturally, in each of these cases, there tendtends to be situational factors underpinning such ambitionsuch ambitious drives and these include a supportive family, access to quality education, and lack of neglect or abuse.
On the whole, working hard is a positive trait. This does not hold true in exceptional instances where individuals experience psychological problemsindividuals are surrounded by psychological problems and work to the detriment of their own well-being. Most employees and entrepreneurs can balance their home and work livesbalance home and work life and therefore minimise the tradeoffs. The advantages, overallon the other hand, are substantial. A diligent worker can expect to earn more money, which can then be used to support their family or reinvested in a passion projectinvested back into a passion project. Elon Musk is a quintessential example of a hard-working businessman who has benefited personallyprofited individually and now contributes greatly to the advancement of mankind through a variety of forward-looking initiatives.
In conclusion, hard work has its source in the make-up of an individual and results in mainly positive outcomesmostly positive benefits. Nonetheless, those who are driven must be wary of losing sight of their true goals as they achieve higher levels of success.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response fully addresses both questions through a clear, nuanced position and well-developed reasoning, and its argument progresses smoothly from causes to evaluation. Its main limitation is occasional awkward or imprecise phrasing alongside a small number of agreement errors in otherwise sophisticated sentences. The priority is to refine collocations and proofread complex constructions so the strong ideas are expressed with consistently natural precision.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both the cause of harder work and its positive or negative character are explored directly, with a clear qualified position and well-supported ideas.
Make the causal analysis even more exact by distinguishing innate temperament from environmental influences rather than grouping them loosely.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay is logically sequenced, paragraphing is effective, and cohesive links guide the reader without drawing excessive attention.
Use contrast markers with slightly greater precision where an exception is being qualified rather than an opposing argument introduced.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is wide and often precise, with effective less common items, though a few collocations sound strained or unnatural.
Refine phrases such as imbued by parents, surrounded by psychological problems, and profited individually into more idiomatic expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are varied and generally accurate, with only occasional non-impeding errors such as faulty agreement in an existential construction.
Proofread agreement in structures such as there tends to be situational factors and maintain the same high control throughout.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people work harder than other. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative habit?
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