The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The bar chart illustrates data regarding the purchasing and consumption patterns of coffee and tea among residents in five cities across Australia over a four-week periodin the last 4 weeks.
Overall, more than half the population in all cities except Adelaide went to a cafe for coffee or tea, making it the most widespread habitmaking the most widespread habit. While buying instant coffee was also widely recorded, buying fresh coffee was consistently the least popular option across all five cities.
Visiting a café was the most common activityThe habit of Cafe visits was the most common in Melbourne and Hobart at 64% and 63%, respectively. The figure for Sydney was similarly high, at about 61%Sydney was similarly high at about 61%, followed by Brisbane at around 56%, and finally Adelaide at about 49.5%. In addition, Adelaide was the only city where instant coffee surpassedovertook cafe visits, with 50% buying instant coffee compared to 49.5% going to a cafe.
Regarding instantInstant coffee, purchases in Hobart made up the highest proportionbiggest share at 54%, followed by Brisbane (around 53%), Adelaide (50%), Melbourne (48%), and lastly Sydney (46%).ahead of Brisbane at around 53%, Adelaide at 50%, Melbourne at 48%, and lastly Sydney at 46%. Buying fresh coffee was below 45% for all cities. Its proportion was relatively high in Sydney at 44% and Melbourne at 42.5%. Meanwhile, Hobart stood at just under 40%38% , while Brisbane and Adelaide were much lower at approximately 34% each.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The report provides a clear, accurate, and comprehensive description of the chart with a strong overview and precise data reporting. Ideas flow logically, supported by appropriate grouping and clear comparative structures. To enhance the overall quality, focus on refining subtle word choices and varied phrasing for recurring categories.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All key features and data points are accurately identified, highlighting prominent trends and regional comparisons.
Ensure all minor grammatical agreements match reported trends, such as adding missing words like 'the' before superlative phrases.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically organized with clear paragraphing and smooth transitions between categories and cities.
Vary linkers further across detail paragraphs to avoid relying on repetitive patterns like listing figures consecutively.
Lexical Resource
A wide range of vocabulary related to data description and proportions is used fluently and appropriately.
Use even more varied synonyms for habits and purchasing actions to avoid light repetition of key terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A broad mix of simple and complex sentence structures is used accurately with minimal punctuation or grammatical errors.
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