The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The bar chart illustrates data regarding the purchasing and consumption patternspattern of coffee and tea among residents in five cities across Australia in the last 4 weeks.
Overall, more than half the population in all cities except Adelaide went to a cafe for coffee or tea, making it the most widespread habitmaking the most widespread habit in four of the five cities. While buying instant coffee was also widely recorded, buying fresh coffee was consistently the least popular option across all five cities.
Turning first to cafe visits, this habithabits was the most common in Melbourne and Hobart at 64% and 63%, respectively. Sydney was similarly high at about 61%, followed by Brisbane at around 56%, and finally Adelaide at about 49.5%. In addition, Adelaide was the only city where instant coffee overtook cafe visits, with 50% buying instant coffee compared to 49.5% going to a cafegoing to cafe.
In Hobart, instant coffee purchases stood at 54%, ahead of Brisbane at 53%, Adelaide at 50%, Melbourne at 48%, and lastly Sydney at 46%. Buying fresh coffee was below 45% for all cities. Its proportion was relatively high in Sydney at 44% and Melbourne at 42.5%. Meanwhile, Hobart stood at 38% , while Brisbane and Adelaide were much lower at approximatelyapproximate 34% each.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response provides an excellent summary of the data, featuring a clear overview and accurate comparisons across all five cities. Ideas are logically organised into cohesive paragraphs with effective transitions. To reach the highest band, minor grammatical slips with agreement and article usage should be eliminated.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Key features are clearly highlighted with precise numerical data and a strong overview of overall trends.
Maintain this high standard by ensuring all key comparisons are seamlessly woven into the data paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a logical structure with clear paragraph division and smooth cohesive linking throughout.
Vary referencing techniques further to avoid minor repetition when presenting series of statistics.
Lexical Resource
A wide range of task-appropriate vocabulary is used naturally and flexibly to report data and trends.
Pay attention to correct word forms in fixed prepositional phrases such as using 'approximately' instead of 'approximate'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex sentence structures is produced with a high degree of control across the response.
Proofread carefully to prevent minor agreement and missing article slips like 'this habits was' or 'going to cafe'.