The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
Sample Response
The pie chart depicts the proportionsusage ratio of different modes of transporttypes of transportations in Edmonton and the table illustrates the purposespurpose of using cars in the same cityarea. It is clear that cars are the most popularthe car is the most popular while rail is the second most preferred mode of transportthe second most preferred transportation types among Edmonton residentsamong the people in Edmonton. As is seen in the pie chart, almostAs is seen in the pie chart almost half of the Edmontonians use cars for transportuse cars for their transportation while more than one-third of them rely on the Light Rail Transit, or LRTLight Rail Transit or LTR. One in ten of them uses the busOne out of ten of them uses bus while the same proportion takes a taxisame proportion of these people takes the taxi for commuting. From the table, it is evident that the majority of Edmontonian people prefer cars to commute to work, for business needs and taking children to schoolschools. Just over half of the car users travel by car to go to work, while 45% use it for business purposes. People who take their children to school in a car account for 40%contribute to 40%. On the other hand, only 15% travels by car for shopping and leisure activity.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response gives a clear overview and accurately reports every transport share and every stated reason for car use, making the main comparisons easy to understand. Its chief limitation is language control: awkward nouns, a mislabeled abbreviation, and recurring agreement errors reduce precision despite strong data coverage. Prioritise natural transport terminology and careful checking of singular and plural verb forms.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview accurately identifies the two leading transport modes, and the response covers all pie-chart shares and car-use purposes with correct figures.
Refine the table overview by stating that commuting is the only purpose used by a majority, while shopping and leisure are jointly lowest.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the transport distribution to reasons for car use, although the single paragraph and repetitive reporting structure limit refinement.
Use separate overview and detail paragraphs, grouping the pie-chart comparison apart from the ranked car-use purposes.
Lexical Resource
A reasonable range of transport and comparison vocabulary is used, but inaccurate forms such as 'transportations,' 'LTR,' and 'contribute to 40%' reduce precision.
Use consistent terms such as 'modes of transport,' 'LRT,' 'accounted for,' and 'travelled by car.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied comparative sentences communicate the figures clearly, though errors with articles, agreement, plurals, and prepositions occur regularly.
Check agreement in forms such as 'one in ten uses' and 'only 15% travel,' and revise awkward noun phrases involving purpose.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
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