The charts below show the Medical research funding amount in millions of Dollars in Someland and also shows the death number for this area.
Sample Response
The bar chart presents information on medicalMedical research funding in Someland while the second graph shows the number of deaths in this area caused by six diseasesnumber of death in this area from six diseases in 1990. Overall, the highest amount of funding was allocated to research AIDS while the highest death could be observed from TB, a disease. As shown in the first graphAs is presented in the first graph, more than $400 million was allocatedmore than 400 million was funded in Someland’s Medical research , of which approximatelyand out of this approximately 175 million went towards AIDS researchwent on AIDS funding. Leprosy and Tropical Diseases funding amounted to aboutamounted about 75 million each and the least funding was allocated to TBlowest funding was allowed for TB. Malaria and Diarrhoea fundingDiarrhea finding received 50 and 60 million respectivelyconsecutively. The second graph shows that the highest number of deathsdeath in Someland was caused by TB. It shows a relationship between the medical research funding for a diseaseMedical research funding on a disease and the deaths caused by these diseases in this areadeath caused by this diseases in this area. Since the lowest amount was funded for TB, the highest number of death was caused by this diseases. A broadly inverse patternA very similar trend could be observed for all the other diseases and the lowest number of deaths was caused by AIDSnumber of death was from AIDS which receivedgot the highest Medical research funding in Someland.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response’s strongest feature is its clear identification of the highest funding for AIDS and the highest death toll for TB, supported by generally accurate funding figures. However, coverage of the deaths chart is too limited, with virtually no figures or comparison of the four middle diseases, while recurrent grammatical and collocational errors reduce precision. Prioritize a balanced comparison of both charts using selected death figures and carefully controlled noun forms.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main extremes and inverse relationship are identified accurately, but the deaths chart receives very limited supporting data and comparison.
Add selected death figures and compare the middle diseases across both charts rather than describing almost all funding data but only the death extremes.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report follows a generally clear sequence from introduction and overview to funding and deaths, though the single-block presentation and repeated causal claims weaken progression.
Use distinct overview and detail paragraphs, then group the two charts through concise comparisons instead of repeating the funding-death relationship.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate topic vocabulary and some effective comparative language, but frequent collocational and word-form errors reduce precision.
Use standard combinations such as funding was allocated to, deaths were caused by, and respectively for the paired figures.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning remains clear overall, but recurring errors with articles, plurals, agreement, and noun phrases limit grammatical control.
Check every reference to deaths, diseases, and funding for correct singular-plural agreement and complete article use.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the Medical research funding amount in millions of Dollars in Someland and also shows the death number for this area.
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