The charts below show the Medical research funding amount in millions of Dollars in Someland and also shows the death number for this area.
Sample Response
The chartsdiagrams present data on the medical research funding for six diseasessix deadly diseases in Someland as well as the deaths caused by those diseases in 1990. A glance at the charts reveals that there was a correlation between the amount spent on researching a disease and the casualties it caused- the higher funding generally produced a better result, at least for AIDS and TB. According to the chartsillustration, the highest medical research funding was allocated to AIDSmedical research budget was allowed for AIDS, around $175 millionaround 175 million and in 1990 the death count in Someland from AIDS was about 0.2 million0.25 million, more than deaths from leprosymore than death from Leprosy but fewer than fatalities caused by any other diseasediseases. By contrastAgain, the smallestlowest research budget was for TB (roughly $25 million)(roughly 25 million) and around 1.75 million people died from this illness, the highest death tollhighest casualties from any disease in Someland in 1990. Medical research fundingreserves for leprosy and tropical diseasesLeprosy and Tropical Diseases were exactly the same, approximately $75 millionapproximately 70 million but deaths from the latterlater disease were noticeably higher. A similar trend could be observed in the cases of Diarrhoea and Malaria, which received around 60 and 50 million respectively for medical research and were responsible for 0.5 and 0.35 million deaths in Someland.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response provides a clear overview and selects nearly all key figures and comparisons, with especially effective coverage of the funding and death extremes. Its main limitation is a small data inaccuracy for AIDS deaths, alongside some awkward wording and the lack of paragraph divisions. The highest priority is to group the overview and detailed comparisons into distinct paragraphs while checking every numerical value precisely against the charts.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and well-selected comparisons cover all six diseases, although the AIDS death figure is slightly overstated.
Verify each numerical value against the axes and retain precise units while preserving the effective cross-chart comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion
The description progresses logically from the overall relationship to major extremes and paired comparisons, but it is presented as one undivided paragraph.
Separate the overview and detailed comparisons into purposeful paragraphs to make the progression easier to follow.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally precise, though collocations such as "budget was allowed" and "research reserves" are awkward.
Use standard chart-reporting combinations such as "funding was allocated" and "research expenditure" for greater precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex structures is handled clearly, with occasional errors in punctuation, comparison wording, and singular-plural agreement.
Proofread long comparative sentences for clause boundaries and forms such as "more deaths than" and "any other disease".
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the Medical research funding amount in millions of Dollars in Someland and also shows the death number for this area.
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