The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.
Sample Response
The provided mapsThe following two maps compare the current layout of the Southwest Airportsouthwest airport with a plan to redesign it.
Overall, Deletewe can see that the renovation will largely expand the northern part of the original airport to a Y-shaped area with more gates. Meanwhile, the layout of the main body will undergo several small changes, with the building structure remaining largely unchanged.
RegardingCommencing with the current layout of the airportaitport, in the south is the main hall divided into two parts: the western part for departures contains a check-in service countercontains check-in service counter onin the west side and a cafe onin the east side, with the security and passport control areasecurity passport control area lying behind; the eastern part is for arrivals, where no special facilities lie in front of the passport control and customspassport control customs. A corridor is connected to the northern side of the hall, featuring eight gates and a walkway inside.
According to the planned future layout, a bigger Y-shaped corridor housing 1812 gates will replace the original northern part of the airport, and the walkway will be demolished to give way to a sky train that connects the hall and the two branches. Inside the hall, shops will be introduced in the departure part, to the north of the security passport control. The cafe and check-in counter will move to the opposite side of the departure loungeto their opposite side, and a bag-drop area will be added. The southeastern side of the hall will expand eastwards, providing space for car hirehiring, and a cafe and an ATMATM machine will be installedput in the eastern hall. Finally, an additional door will be addeda gate will be appended respectively for the departure side and the arrival side.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response presents a thorough and well-organized comparison of the airport maps, highlighting key structural and facility changes accurately. Its main strength lies in its logical structure and sophisticated sentence transitions, though slight detail inaccuracies in gate counts and minor grammatical typos are present. To improve further, ensure exact precision when counting data features and proofread carefully to eliminate small mechanical slips.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response contains a clear, effective overview and accurately describes nearly all major structural and internal changes.
Ensure precision with data details, such as noting that the total number of gates increases to 18 rather than 12.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay is logically structured into clear paragraphs with smooth transition phrases that make progression effortless to follow.
Maintain this effective paragraphing style while ensuring sentence-level cohesive devices remain fully natural.
Lexical Resource
A wide range of vocabulary appropriate for map descriptions is used flexibly throughout the response.
Refine word choices in precise contexts, such as using 'doors' or 'entrances' instead of 'gates' when referring to access points at the hall entrance.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good variety of complex grammatical structures is controlled well across the response with mostly accurate execution.
Proofread for minor typos and prepositional errors, such as misspellings or using 'in the west side' instead of 'on the west side'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.
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