The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
Sample Response
The graphs illustrate why people from different age groups continue their studies and the support they receive from employerssupport employers offered to them in terms of financial assistance and time offfinancial and time off.
Overall, it is obvious that there is a decreasing trend among students who study for career reasonsstudy for their profession as they become older, while the opposite trend is seenwhereas the reverse is true for those who study out of personal intereststudy for passion. It is apparent that the highest percentage of students (80%) study for their career and they are under 26 years old. Turning to personal interest as a reason for studyingTurning to the personal interest as a reason for the study, as age increasesthe higher the age, the proportion studying out of personal interest increasesthe ratio of pupil learning from passion increases. In addition, equal proportions of peoplean equal percentage of people, aged 40 to 49aged 40 to 49, study for their career and personal interestinterest in subjects. The second bar chart reveals that employers provided more supportthe employers gave more support to younger employeestheir young employees (those under 26 years old) and workers over 49elderly workers while the least support went to thosewith the least support provided to those in the age range between 30 and 39 years old.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response's strongest feature is its clear overview of the opposing age-related study trends and the U-shaped pattern in employer support. However, the supporting detail is too limited, with only one exact percentage and no numerical development of the second chart. The highest-priority improvement is to add selective figures for every age group and make direct comparisons that substantiate each overview statement.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main trends, crossover, and support minimum are accurately identified, but the report provides too few figures to develop both charts fully.
Support the overview with selected values across all age groups, including the decline in career study, rise in interest, and changes in employer support.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and overview lead into relevant details coherently, although the information is concentrated in one long body paragraph.
Use separate detail paragraphs for reasons for study and employer support, with comparisons grouped consistently by age.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied enough to describe trends and comparisons, but expressions involving 'passion', 'ratio', and financial support are sometimes awkward.
Prefer precise chart language such as 'study for personal interest', 'proportion of students', and 'support with fees and time off'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a good range of complex structures with generally accurate control, and the remaining errors do not impede meaning.
Refine article use, agreement, and parallel phrasing, especially in sentences comparing career study with personal interest.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
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