The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
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Sample Response
The chart provides a breakdown of the number of households by annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015based on the annual income in years 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Overall, families with the annualyearly income of more than 100,000 dollars reported the highest number in years 2007 and 2015, which is in sharp contrast with households with the salary between 75,000 and 99,999 dollars.
In 2007, families with the income of more thanincome more than 100,000 dollars and 25,000-49,999 dollars recorded the highest number, which showed a slight fluctuation in 2011 and 2015. HouseholdsHousholds with 100,000 reported a gradual decrease in number, from nearly 30 million to roughly 27 million, before rising to theirits overall peak, approximately 34 million, in 2015. Meanwhile, in the $25,000-$49,999 bracket,As for the people with the salary of 25,000-49,999 dollars, the number grew marginally by the year 2011, before dropping to nearly 28 million households in 2015.
Furthermore, families with an income of less thanthat 25,000 dollars also showed a rise followed by a slight decreaseirregular changes throughout the years. Starting at roughly 25 million households in 2007,Starting from 35 million households the number reached nearly 30 million in 2011, which was followed by a slight dropwhich was followed by slight drop to approximately 27 million families.
In contrast, the number of households with anthe income of 50,000-74,999 dollars remained stable, standing at roughly 21 million, across the periodduring the years. Lastly, families with an annual income of $75,000-$99,999 were the least common, at roughly 15 million households, and did notannual salary of 75,000-99,999 are at the lowest point of the graph , at roughly 15 million households, and didn't report any major changes in the following yearsin following years.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response effectively provides a clear overview and highlights the main trends across income brackets. However, Task Achievement is compromised by significant data reporting inaccuracies, such as mistaking the starting figure for households earning under $25,000. To improve, cross-check all numerical data carefully against the visual chart before writing.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview correctly identifies major trends, but key data details contain notable inaccuracies.
Verify every specific figure against the visual prompt to ensure accurate data reporting throughout the report.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically organized into paragraphs with a generally clear overall progression.
Use more accurate sentence linkers and avoid repeating mechanical transition phrases at the start of paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
The response uses an adequate range of vocabulary, though minor spelling and phrasing lapses occur.
Vary word choices for income groups and correct spelling errors such as 'Housholds'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentence forms is attempted, though minor grammatical and prepositional errors persist.
Proofread for minor grammatical slips such as missing prepositions and typographical errors like 'less that'.