The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
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The chart provides a breakdown of the number of US households by annual incomenumber of households by annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015.
Overall, families with anthe annual income of more than 100,000 dollars reported the highest number in the years 2007 and 2015in years 2007 and 2015, which is in sharp contrast with households with an incomewith the salary between 75,000 and 99,999 dollars.
In 2007, families with the income of more than 100,000 dollars and 25,000-49,999 dollars recorded the highest number, which showed a slight fluctuation in 2011 and 2015. Households earning over $100,000Households with 100,000 reported a moderategradual decrease in number, from nearly 30 million to roughly 27 million, before rising to their overall peak, approximately 34 million, in 2015. Meanwhile, in the $25,000-$49,999 bracket, the number grew marginally by the year 2011, before dropping to nearly 28 million households in 2015.
Furthermore, families with an income of less than 25,000 dollars also showed a rise followed by a slight decrease over the periodthroughout the years. Starting at roughly 25 million households in 2007, the number reached nearly 30 million in 2011, which was followed by a slight drop to approximately 27 million families.
In contrast, the number of households with an income of 50,000-74,999 dollars remained stable, standing at roughly 21 million, across the period. Lastly, families with an annual income of $75,000-$99,999 were the least common, at roughly 15 million households, and did not report any major changes in the following years.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response presents a clear and accurate overview of the chart's key trends, supported by precise numerical evidence across all income brackets. Information is logically organized into well-structured paragraphs with smooth cohesive transitions. To enhance performance further, refine occasional awkward word choices and ensure prepositions and noun phrases are consistently accurate.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All key features and data points across the three years are accurately highlighted and supported by accurate visual data.
Ensure the overview highlights both the highest and lowest general trends or overall patterns across the entire period even more succinctly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically grouped by income categories with clear paragraphing and appropriate transition signals.
Vary cohesive devices slightly to avoid repeating structural patterns like 'In contrast' or 'Furthermore'.
Lexical Resource
A wide range of vocabulary appropriate for data description is used flexibly and accurately throughout.
Replace slightly repetitive phrasing like 'families with the annual income' with more natural alternatives such as 'households earning'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex sentence structures are used with a high degree of grammatical accuracy and control.
Ensure minor prepositional accuracy, such as writing 'households earning $100,000' rather than 'households with 100,000'.