Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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There exists an increasing trend in recent years that more people are turning to alternative medicines and treatments rather than consulting with their usual doctor when having health problems. In my opinion, despite a few possible benefitsfew possible benefits, this development brings about a lot more setbacks that will do great harm to both patients and the whole society.

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The argument in favor of such a trendsuch trend is that the chance to survive for patients may increase as the choices of medical care methods increase. Compared with usual doctors that have received limited training and don't have much knowledge about the latest development of medicine, alternative medicines and treatments derived from the newest scientific researchresearches may provide unexpected improvements to patients' health. For example, people suffering from tumorstumor tend to choose medicines that are still under trialtests when no existent methods can help them survive, and they decide to roll the dicethrow a dice. In this way, it seems reasonable to consider alternative medicines and treatments as a help to curing fatal diseases.

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However, this approach also results in several harmfulharming outcomes to patients and the society, outweighing the minor benefits it cannot ensure. For patients, their usual doctors are the only expertsexpertise about their conditions in most cases, and believing in methods that their usual doctors disapprove ofdisapprove is absolutely a risky move. The current situation may be depressing, the prospect may be bleak, but it doesn't mean that it is a wise move for patients to gamble their lives for a seemingly promising future using measures that probably don't suit their particular conditionstatus at all. In fact, people with terminal diseases who are most desperate for trying new alternatives receive a much lower survival ratequite lower survival chance than continuing with original treatments.

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Moreover, as the trend grows popular, the relationship of trusttrust relationship between patients and doctors will gradually collapse, thereby affecting the medical care for the whole society. As the number of patients who have little professional knowledge refuse to take doctors' prescriptions rise, more ordinary people will be affected by this trend believe less in doctors' suggestions, even if they are always right. What's worse, false advertisementsfake advertisement will make use of this general skepticism, trying to promote their fake but well-publicizedwell publicized products to more people, and gradually replacing the hospital's role in medical care. Do we really want to live in a society wherethat people take fake pills instead of professional medical careprofessional people's help to cure diseases?

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In conclusion, people's distrust of usual doctorsdistrust usual doctors and turning to alternative medicines and treatments is a harmful development that risks both patients' lives and the medical trust of the society for a negligible amount of luck.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

文章结构清晰,立场鲜明,能够从患者和社会两个维度对替代疗法的利弊进行充分论证。然而,文中对“替代疗法”的理解略偏向于未上市的新药试验,且存在少量词汇搭配和语法小错。最优先的改进方向是准确精准地理解题目核心概念,并进一步提升复杂句型的表达精准度。

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IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

任务回应

7.0
Scoring rule

文章清晰回答了题目问题,立场明确,并从个人和社会层面展开了有力的论证。

Next step

注意精准理解“替代疗法”(如草药、针灸等)的常见含义,避免将其与临床新药试验混淆。

CC

连贯与衔接

7.0
Scoring rule

段落划分合理,上下文逻辑衔接自然,论点推进非常顺畅。

Next step

适当丰富段落内部的衔接词类型,使句际之间的逻辑过渡更加多样灵活。

LR

词汇资源

7.0
Scoring rule

展现了较丰富的词汇量,能够使用与健康和医疗相关的较高级表达。

Next step

注意部分动名词搭配和名词用法的准确性,如用 expert 替代 expertise 表示专家。

GRA

语法多样性与准确性

7.0
Scoring rule

句式结构多样,能够熟练运用主从复合句和反问句,整体语法控制良好。

Next step

注意主谓一致及词性搭配的细节,避免出现如 people's distrust usual doctors 等语法瑕疵。

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