Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
Clothes designers overwhelm us nowadays with quick changing fashion developments and new trends. It's commonly thought that the aim for fashion organisers is merely due to economic reasons. There are some groups in society who totally ignore these commercialised influences and insist on wearing what is convenient to them. In addition to the purpose of clothing to be practical and light to wear, it's quite a waste to follow seasonal modes. In this way, our choices are limited and we have to dispose of our unfashionable outfits. Instead of discarding those clothes we could keep them and combine them the next season.
Among teens, clothes play a primary role in creating social establishments. Pupils chose to wear well-known brands with the negative consequences for those who can't afford to buy these. In my opinion, it's easier for both parents and youth to be obliged to wear a school uniform. Then students will be valued only according behaviour and not by their newest dress.
Although I am convinced that clothing companies are interested in their bank account and use fashion as a way to attract potential buyers, for some it may be a rescue. Some people just don't have a notion for what fits together. They need a professional eye to advice them what to buy and what to wear. Maybe also in some circles society imposes on them what to wear.
In summary, I think people should wear what they love and prefer. They should feel free to improvise and use their imagination. Society will be more vivid and gay if people wear what they like without certain boundaries pressing on them.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Natural noun phrase Original: Clothes Suggested revision: Clothing Why it matters: 'Clothing designers' is the standard term for people who design clothes.
- 2. Use an adverb Original: quick Suggested revision: quickly Why it matters: An adverb is needed to modify 'changing'.
- 3. More precise wording Original: developments Suggested revision: trends Why it matters: 'Fashion trends' expresses the intended idea more naturally.
- 4. Correct possessive form Original: the aim for fashion organisers Suggested revision: fashion organisers' aim Why it matters: The possessive form clearly shows that the aim belongs to the organisers.
- 5. Fix faulty collocation Original: is merely due to economic reasons Suggested revision: is purely economic Why it matters: An aim can be economic, whereas saying it is 'due to reasons' creates a faulty relationship.
- 6. Natural collocation Original: what is convenient to them Suggested revision: what is comfortable for them Why it matters: Clothes are normally described as comfortable for someone rather than convenient to them.
- 7. Choose the right noun Original: modes Suggested revision: fashions Why it matters: 'Modes' does not naturally refer to seasonal clothing trends here.
- 8. Clarify the action Original: combine them the next season Suggested revision: wear them in different combinations the next season Why it matters: The revision makes clear that the clothes are combined into new outfits.
- 9. Correct word choice Original: establishments Suggested revision: relationships Why it matters: 'Relationships' conveys interpersonal connections, while 'establishments' does not.
- 10. Use present tense Original: chose Suggested revision: choose Why it matters: The paragraph describes a general present-day tendency, so the present tense is required.
- 11. Remove the article Original: with the negative consequences Suggested revision: with negative consequences Why it matters: The plural noun is used generally here and does not take 'the'.
- 12. Use object pronoun Original: these Suggested revision: them Why it matters: A pronoun is needed to refer back to the previously mentioned brands.
Suggested Rewrites
- Clothes Clothing
- quick quickly
- developments trends
- the aim for fashion organisers fashion organisers' aim
- is merely due to economic reasons is purely economic
- what is convenient to them what is comfortable for them
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response presents a clear position and offers several relevant reasons, including waste, peer pressure and commercial motives, with a useful concession about people who need fashion guidance. Development is uneven, however, and some examples drift or remain only briefly explained, while recurring awkward wording and grammatical slips reduce precision. The highest priority is to build each reason through a clear claim, explanation and specific consequence, using more natural collocations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses the opinion with a clear stance and several relevant ideas, though support is uneven and occasionally tangential.
Develop each main reason with a precise explanation or example that directly demonstrates why following fashion is undesirable.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument is broadly easy to follow and divided into purposeful paragraphs, but progression within paragraphs is sometimes loose.
Organise each body paragraph around one controlling idea and make the link between consecutive sentences more explicit.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient range to discuss consumerism and social pressure, but frequent unnatural collocations reduce precision.
Prioritise accurate common combinations such as rapidly changing trends, comfortable clothing and advise someone what to wear.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the message clearly, although agreement, articles and sentence construction remain inconsistent.
Edit systematically for subject-verb agreement, missing prepositions and correct verb forms, especially advice versus advise.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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