In modern cities an increasing number of people do not know their neighbor and never feel a sense of community. What are the causes of this situation? How can we change it?

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In an era when a growing proportion of the population livesa mounting number of population lives in urban regions, the phenomenon that residents tend to be unfamiliar with their neighbors and lack a sense of community and belongingbelongings has sparked an intense debate. From my perspective, the prevalence of the Internet and urbanization trends may contribute to this phenomenon. In order to address it, the government should take immediate and effective measures. To begin with, there is no denying that the popularity of the Internet and portable digital devices, including mobile phones, tablets and laptops, weakens the tiesestranges the relationships between neighbors. With its convenience and efficiency in communication, individuals get accustomed to utilizing mobile phones to interact with their friends or families, which can transcend geographical and temporal barriers. However, online chatting characterized by insufficient face-to-face communication may impair people’s capabilities to distinguish others' emotionsdistinguish others emotions through subtle facial expressionsexpression and body languagegestures. Therefore, when people want to socialize with their neighbors, they tend to ignore their genuine feelings. Besides, digital indulgence means that netizens are immersed in the virtual world and activitiesin virtual world and activities such as scrolling through short videosscrolling short videos, playing games and chatting with strangers, reducing their free time forto offline communication with neighbors. More importantly, due to the configuration of modern cities and the structure of buildingssince the configuration of modern cities and structure of buildings, it is difficult for citizens to become acquainted withacquaint with their neighbors. Undoubtedly, compared to the past when dwellers inhabited bungalowsinhabit in bungalow with large public spaces, contemporary cities are packed with apartments and skyscrapers where people’s privacy ispeople’ privacy are being strengthened at the expense of public areas for social interaction to promote interpersonal relationships. First and foremost, the government can allocate more funds towards the construction of community centers with more amenities, which can enable neighbors to engage in communal activities and make friendsacquaintances with each other. Furthermore, it is advisable for the local authority to enact some policies or regulations to incentivize the face-to-face interactions. For instance, residentspersons who develop a sound relationship with their neighborsneighbor can be rewarded with a reasonable sum of subsidieswith reasonable sum of subsidies to stimulate other people’s motivation.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The essay directly addresses both causes and solutions regarding the loss of neighborly connections, offering well-developed main ideas and a logical structure. While the vocabulary is varied and advanced in places, minor grammatical inaccuracies and slightly unrealistic suggestions weaken the overall impact. To improve, focus on refining complex sentence accuracy and proposing more practical, grounded solutions.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

7.0
Scoring rule

The response fully addresses both the causes and solutions to the problem with relevant explanations.

Next step

Ensure proposed solutions are realistic and persuasive rather than overly idealistic, such as financial subsidies for making friends.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0
Scoring rule

The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs with a smooth progression of ideas.

Next step

Vary cohesive devices and transitions to make paragraph topic sentences feel more natural and less formulaic.

LR

Lexical Resource

7.0
Scoring rule

A good range of sophisticated vocabulary is used to convey precise meanings throughout the response.

Next step

Pay closer attention to word partner choices and fixed expressions to avoid occasional awkward phrasing like 'mounting number of population'.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5
Scoring rule

A mix of simple and complex sentence forms is attempted, though structural errors occasionally occur.

Next step

Review complex sentence boundaries and prepositions to prevent grammatical slips in longer clauses.

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IELTS Writing Task 2

In modern cities an increasing number of people do not know their neighbor and never feel a sense of community. What are the causes of this situation? How can we change it?

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