Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live?
Sample Response
Food is one of the fundamental needs of the people. People are slowly increasing passion towards the taste of the food and some people are becoming crazy about the food. These people always require different tastes and invent new and easy methods to prepare food. These new inventions always change the lifestyle and let us discuss how it made the difference in our life.
Old is gold always. Certain people do not want to miss the raw taste and use the new machinery like mixers or grinders. They want to prepare in old style without machinery and grasp the complete taste of food. Still, my grandfather never uses machinery and enjoys the raw taste.
There is always another side of the coin. Nowadays, people are becoming busy and don't have time to spend much for cooking food. So they started inventing new methods which made cooking easy. People invented new types of machinery like gas stoves, induction stoves, cookers, mixers and so on. All these inventions changed people's lifestyle. It saved people's time and people started investing time in other activities. And these new inventions also produced good taste and different varieties and caused a dramatic change in lifestyle. I always use all possible machinery to prepare tasty food for my family. And especially in restaurants, chefs use the latest technology to prepare tasty food and this has changed the lifestyle too. Nowadays people can get food with whatever calories they want in their daily life
In conclusion, I prefer to prepare tasty food in easy methods using latest machinery.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use natural phrasing Original: needs of the people Suggested revision: human needs Why it matters: This is a more concise and natural way to express the general idea.
- 2. Fix verb pattern Original: increasing passion towards Suggested revision: becoming more passionate about Why it matters: The original verb-noun combination and preposition are not grammatically natural.
- 3. Avoid repetition Original: the taste of the food Suggested revision: food Why it matters: The shorter wording avoids unnecessary repetition of “food” and “taste.”
- 4. Use formal wording Original: becoming crazy about the food Suggested revision: becoming obsessed with food Why it matters: The replacement expresses the same idea in a more appropriate academic register.
- 5. Fix word choice Original: require different tastes Suggested revision: seek different flavours Why it matters: People seek flavours rather than require tastes in this context.
- 6. Improve collocation Original: invent new and easy methods Suggested revision: develop new and convenient methods Why it matters: Methods are more naturally developed, and convenient precisely describes ease of preparation.
- 7. Fix tense and number Original: always change the lifestyle Suggested revision: have changed people’s lifestyles Why it matters: The present perfect suits a change continuing to the present, and the plural form is needed for people generally.
- 8. Use natural phrase Original: in old style Suggested revision: in the traditional way Why it matters: The replacement is the idiomatic expression for a traditional method of preparation.
- 9. Correct collocation Original: grasp the complete taste Suggested revision: preserve the full flavour Why it matters: One preserves flavour; “grasp taste” is not a natural collocation.
- 10. Use example linker Original: Still, my grandfather Suggested revision: For example, my grandfather Why it matters: The sentence supplies an example rather than a contrast, so “For example” shows the relationship accurately.
- 11. Fix word order Original: time to spend much for cooking food Suggested revision: much time to spend cooking Why it matters: The replacement uses the correct word order and the pattern “spend time doing something.”
- 12. Clarify reference Original: It saved people's time Suggested revision: These appliances save people time Why it matters: A plural noun phrase gives the pronoun a clear referent and requires a plural verb.
Suggested Rewrites
- needs of the people human needs
- increasing passion towards becoming more passionate about
- the taste of the food food
- becoming crazy about the food becoming obsessed with food
- require different tastes seek different flavours
- invent new and easy methods develop new and convenient methods
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response maintains a recognizable position and organizes its main ideas into distinct paragraphs, with the clearest support coming from the discussion of time-saving appliances. However, the argument is repetitive and only partly developed, while awkward word choices and frequent grammatical errors weaken precision. The priority is to explain two focused benefits with specific cause-and-effect support and then state a direct answer to the question in the conclusion.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response answers the question with a generally positive view, but its reasons are repetitive and only partly explained.
Develop two distinct ways easier preparation improves life and support each with a clear explanation or example.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing provides a visible structure, though progression is weakened by mechanical transitions, repetition, and an overextended third paragraph.
Give each body paragraph one controlling idea and connect its supporting sentences through clear cause-and-effect progression.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary covers the topic, but repetition and awkward collocations such as phrases about taste, time, and machinery limit precision.
Use more precise combinations such as save preparation time, broaden food choices, and improve convenience while avoiding repeated general words.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms is attempted, but frequent errors with articles, agreement, prepositions, and sentence construction reduce accuracy.
Prioritize accurate complete sentences by checking subject-verb agreement, articles, and prepositions in every sentence.
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Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live?
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