Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live?
Sample Response
Food has always been a priority for the human species and they have continually invented ways to produce more food, more recipes, preserve them and make them delicious and healthy. The development of technology has brought advantages, improving the way we live in general, and the way we prepare our meal. So that it has brought more efficiency to our life. Food is the primary need for any species from the smallest (micro-species) to the tallest, strongest and the most intelligent - the human. It is completely incomparable the ways we used to prepare food centuries ago with that of the modern era. For example, the human race was denominated by nomads, moving from places to places in search of food, while men had to hunt animals for meat. All of these are no longer applicable in the modern society. However, if we compare food preparation and preservation with that of a few decades earlier, we are few miles ahead of them. Our needs to invest less time in cooking and more time for professional and family needs have been possible because we have modern devices like the burner, microwave oven, rice cooker, pressure cooker, electric heater, refrigerator and so on. With the help of the internet, anyone these days can be a cook and prepare meal native to other countries. The advancement of technology has brought a huge range of devices and many of them have eliminated the need for a long and complex process to prepare a food or drinks. For instance, a coffee maker enables anyone to enjoy a cup of coffee any time he wishes. With those appliances, we have more time to relieve our daily stress, meet friends, do exercises or works, concentrate on our hobbies and so on. We must thank the technology for a richer and easier life. Some disadvantages of this trend are pointed out by a group of people and those demerits should not be overlooked. Modern devices have negative environmental impacts and health hazards to an extent. To conclude, taking references from history, the way our century-old ancestors lived in the past, our life transformed greatly due to the advancement of technology, especially in food-making process. The human species has now more time to dedicate to useful activities.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Fix pronoun agreement Original: the human species and they Suggested revision: humans, who Why it matters: The plural noun “humans” agrees with the later actions and avoids the singular collective antecedent.
- 2. Use plural meals Original: meal Suggested revision: meals Why it matters: The general activity involves meals collectively, so the plural is required.
- 3. Fix sentence fragment Original: So that it has brought Suggested revision: Consequently, this has brought Why it matters: “So that” creates a dependent fragment, while the replacement forms a complete sentence.
- 4. Use plural lives Original: life Suggested revision: lives Why it matters: The general reference to multiple people's lives requires the plural.
- 5. Use precise survival phrase Original: the primary need for any species Suggested revision: a basic need for every species Why it matters: “A basic need” is more natural than ranking food as the single primary need.
- 6. Use correct organism term Original: micro-species Suggested revision: microorganisms Why it matters: “Micro-species” is not the standard term for very small living organisms.
- 7. Use plural humans Original: the human. Suggested revision: humans. Why it matters: The species is referred to generally with the plural noun “humans.”
- 8. Fix repeated place phrase Original: from places to places Suggested revision: from place to place Why it matters: The fixed expression uses singular “place” on both sides.
- 9. Remove generic article Original: in the modern society Suggested revision: in modern society Why it matters: “Society” takes no article when used generally.
- 10. Use direct comparison Original: few miles ahead of them Suggested revision: far more advanced Why it matters: The distance metaphor has no clear referent and is unsuitable for comparing methods.
- 11. Fix number and origin Original: prepare meal native to other countries Suggested revision: prepare meals from other countries Why it matters: The general count noun should be plural, and dishes are described as being “from” countries.
- 12. Use natural development phrase Original: brought a huge range of devices Suggested revision: produced a wide range of devices Why it matters: Technology produces or enables devices; “brings a huge range” is less natural.
Suggested Rewrites
- the human species and they humans, who
- meal meals
- So that it has brought Consequently, this has brought
- life lives
- the primary need for any species a basic need for every species
- micro-species microorganisms
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response clearly argues that easier food preparation has improved life by saving time for work, family, exercise, and leisure, and it supports this with numerous appliance examples. Its main weakness is weak focus: historical discussion occupies too much space, disadvantages are only mentioned, and the entire essay is presented as one dense block. Prioritise a concise thesis and two organised paragraphs explaining time savings and broader food access, with fewer lists and cleaner sentence structures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The question is answered affirmatively and the time-saving benefit is relevant and extended, but historical material is overdeveloped and the health and environmental drawbacks are merely asserted.
Focus on two present-day improvements—convenience and access to varied meals—and either develop the drawbacks briefly or omit them.
Coherence and Cohesion
The main direction is identifiable, but single-block organisation, long lists, historical digression, and abrupt shifts weaken progression.
Use an introduction, separate paragraphs for convenience and lifestyle benefits, and a conclusion that directly restates the answer.
Lexical Resource
The response has enough topic vocabulary for appliances, preservation, technology, and lifestyle, but many word choices and collocations are inaccurate.
Use food preparation, meals, labour-saving appliances, spend less time cooking, household tasks, exercise, and prepare dishes from other cuisines.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is usually clear, but sentence fragments, agreement, articles, pronoun reference, plurals, comparisons, and verb forms are frequently inaccurate.
Rewrite fragments as complete sentences and correct forms such as meals, modern society, a few decades ago, drinks, exercise, work, and has transformed.
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