Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
While some individuals argue that the extinctionthat extinction of certain species of plants and animals has become the main environmental issue in this era, others believe other environmental problems are more deserving of concernmore worthy of being concerned. In my opinion, climate change is a much more important issue since it is the root cause of various problems including the extinction of speciesincluding extinction of species. Admittedly, the loss of particular species has posed serious potential threats to human existence. In agricultureIn the agricultural area, animals play a role of vital importance in various steps in the production. For example, the seeding of many plants relies heavily on bees. It is estimated that 70% of crops need bees to bring pollen to blossomsthe blossom in order to produce seeds. According to furtheranother research, unfortunately, a plummet in the population of bees was observed, and many plants are facing the risk of dying out because of this, which poses serious threats to food production and biodiversity. However, focusing only on saving particular species of plants and animals is an omission of more serious threats. Although climate change is a natural phenomenon, there has been an increasing number of reports of unusual climate activities like extreme high or low temperatures due to human activities such as excessive emission of carbon-dioxide, which is actually posing a more serious threat tomore serious threat to human existence. The stability of temperature is the bedrock of the survival of species since almost all species cannot endure extreme temperatures including humanshuman. Therefore, climate change is actually the root cause of the extinction of certain species and addressing climate change is also dealing with the loss of specieswith loss of species. In conclusion, although extinction of particular species warrants concernis worthy of concerning, I believe that authorities and individuals should pay greater attention to climate change because it is a key factor influencing not only animals and plants but also human existence.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response effectively addresses both sides of the prompt while maintaining a clear, well-reasoned opinion that positions climate change as the fundamental issue. The argument flows logically across well-structured paragraphs with clear main ideas and specific supporting evidence. To elevate the writing further, refine occasional word choices and prepositions to ensure fully natural academic expression.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay thoroughly addresses both perspectives in the prompt and maintains a clear, well-supported position throughout.
Ensure both viewpoints are explored with equal depth before introducing your own perspective as the deciding factor.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing is logical and ideas progress smoothly with cohesive devices used effectively across the text.
Vary transitional phrases between paragraphs to make topic transitions feel even more seamless and less formulaic.
Lexical Resource
The candidate uses a broad vocabulary with precise topic-specific phrasing alongside occasional minor collocational slips.
Refine subtle prepositional and participle uses, such as replacing 'worthy of being concerned' with 'deserving of concern'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide variety of complex sentence structures is used accurately with only rare minor grammatical errors.
Pay close attention to singular/plural noun forms and article usage in complex clauses to achieve complete grammatical precision.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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