Opinion Essay

The government and individuals are spending too much money on national celebrations like the new year or festivals. Do you agree or disagree?

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    In many countries, governments and individuals spend a significant amount of money on national celebrations such as New Year or other festivals. While some people believe this expenditure is excessive, I partially agree because such celebrations have both advantages and drawbacks.

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    Lexical Resource
    Band 7.0
    Grammatical Range and Accuracy
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    The government expenditure on cultural occasions has seen a gradual albeit substantial rise over the last few years. This has resulted in a deficiency of funds for investment in vital segments of the economy.

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