Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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In our society, many people believe that competition is a vital component in establishing a positive personality and behaviour. Parents for instance, always say that life is a constant battle and in order to become successful, training children to become competitive in the early stage of their lives will be helpful.
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Nowadays, the purpose of education has changed in my country - Korea. There are some People who think that competition in children should be made, also others believe that children who are taught to co-operate as well as become more useful adults.