The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
Sample Response
Nowadays, life has changed dramatically due to technological developments and globalizationglobalizations. Many traditionalorthodox ways of livingspending lives have become obsoleteobsolete and outdated. Some people still adhere to their traditions and cultures and are very reluctant to accept new and modern ways of lifelives. However, some people state that in order to meet current challengescompete with the current challenges, we should preparetrain our younger generation with the modern ideaslatest and trendy ideas.
Firstly, people used to live in the joint family system in the past decades. This gave them the opportunity to learn from their ancestors about various aspects of life. There was always a special place for elder people of the family and younger used to obey and respect them and followed their instructions in every possible. ThisSuch kind of love and respect is hard to see in a modern lifestylein modern lifestyle. Adults nowadays have become more independent andindependent, and are showing less respect fortowards their parents’ decisions and other aspects of life.
Secondly, there has been an element of care for their family and other members of the society in the past. Now, everyone first thinks about their own interestsbenefit and is less likely to careand less likely to care about others. By this, I mean that new ideas contribute toin making our generation selfish and self-centredegoist.
Thirdly, there is a significant change in people’s behaviour in the modern world; they have less patience while doing any work. They have become less active and more inclined to take shortcutsmore opted towards shortcuts and less willing to workless mean of work.
Finally, I strongly believe that traditional ways for preparing younger generation is idle and have many in-deniable benefits than modern ways of handling youngsters.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response presents a consistent preference for traditional values and offers relevant observations about family respect, care for others, and patience. However, the position is delayed until the final sentence, several claims receive only brief assertion, and persistent language errors reduce clarity; the highest-priority improvement is to state the degree of agreement in the introduction and develop each supporting idea with a concrete explanation or example.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay ultimately gives a relevant position and several supporting reasons, but that position is unclear in the introduction and the reasons are only partly developed.
State a precise degree of agreement at the outset and explain how each traditional value specifically prepares young people for modern life.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a recognisable sequence of ideas, but ordinal linking is mechanical and the short later paragraphs create an uneven progression.
Group related points into fully developed body paragraphs linked by their logical relationship rather than by a numbered list.
Lexical Resource
The writer attempts a reasonably varied vocabulary, but inaccurate forms and awkward choices such as globalizations, ways of lives, and idle frequently impair precision.
Choose familiar words accurately and proofread collocations and word forms before using less common vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms is attempted, but frequent errors with articles, plurals, agreement, and incomplete constructions reduce control and sometimes disrupt reading.
Build accurate complete clauses first, with particular attention to articles and subject-verb agreement, before combining them into longer sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
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