The gap between the rich and the poor is becoming wider; the rich are becoming richer, and the poor are getting even poorer. What problems can the situation cause? What can be done to reduce this gap?
Sample Response
It is true that nowadays rich people are getting even richer and poor people have become poorer especially in developing countries. This situation has presented a wide variety of problems to the community and it has negatively affected a country's developmentdevelopments. To tackle these problems I believe that governments and authorities should take necessary steps and implement laws to improve the living standards of financially poor people.
To begin with, studies have shown that poverty and crimecrimes are correlated owing to the fact that people are committing crimes to earncommitting crimes for earning a living. Furthermore, childrenchildren's of poorer parents are often not able to access higher education even if they may have academic talenteven they may have talents in their studies. As a result, they are not hired for a well-paid joba wealthy job. This means that they will probablyThis means that probably they will live their lives in difficult circumstances and povertyunder uncomfortable circumstances and poverty. That will create instability in a countrypresent uncertainty in one country. Moreover, public health in a countrythe public health of one country would deteriorate if people in one country are living in extreme poverty.
To tackle these worrying concerns, governmentsconcerns governments need to doshould need to do more workworks to minimiseminimising the gap between poorer people and richer people. Firstly, governments should provide financial support for people who are living in difficult financial circumstancesunder uncomfortable financial circumstances. Secondly, governments should ensure the quality of education for all of their citizens. That will definitely help to reduce povertyreduce the poverty as well as increaseincreasing the living standards of financially poor families. Finally, developed countries should take greater responsibility and make more efforttake more responsibility and efforts to eradicate poverty from the world. These efforts have already been seenThese efforts already have been seen in some African countries and theythat have helped many people to increase their living standards.
To conclude I believe that we as a human everyone has rights to get access to education and quality life. In addition, education is the most useful weapon to fight against poverty. In this sense, governments should ensure the quality of education for all of their citizens. That will certainly help to reduce the gap between richer and poorer people.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response clearly covers both requested parts and uses a sensible problem–solution structure, with education presented as a coherent central remedy. Development is uneven, however: several consequences and solutions are asserted briefly, the role of developed countries is only loosely connected to reducing inequality, and repetition weakens the ending. Develop fewer points more fully by explaining the causal chain and giving specific, relevant support for each proposed measure.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both the problems and possible solutions are addressed with a clear position, but several ideas remain general or only briefly supported.
Select the strongest problems and measures, then explain exactly how each one causes or reduces the wealth gap.
Coherence and Cohesion
The problem–solution paragraphing is logical and easy to follow, although mechanical sequencing, vague references and repetition weaken cohesion.
Use clearer logical links within paragraphs and replace repeated conclusion material with a concise synthesis of the argument.
Lexical Resource
The response uses enough vocabulary to discuss poverty, education and public policy, but inaccurate word choice and collocation occur regularly.
Build accuracy with common combinations such as commit crime, secure a well-paid job, improve living standards and make greater efforts.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The writer attempts varied sentence forms and meaning remains generally clear, but errors in agreement, articles, possession and verb patterns are frequent.
Prioritise subject–verb agreement and verb complementation, especially after modal verbs and structures involving help, reduce and increase.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The gap between the rich and the poor is becoming wider; the rich are becoming richer, and the poor are getting even poorer. What problems can the situation cause? What can be done to reduce this gap?
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