The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
For some people the workIing week should be reduced in order to give a longer rest to the workers. This essay will discuss the arguments against workers having a shorter working time, and the possible benefits of this policywhat are the possible benefits of this policy, then i will say my opinion.
The main point against this request is that the productivity would suffer with fewerless workers available; consequently,available, consequently the workers themselves would experienceexperiment a decrease in quality of life, this argument sustainssustain that it would cause a negative effect in everyone, not only business would be damaged.
On the other hand there are some benefits that could outweighoutweight the negative effects. The most important factor, the welfarefactor that is the welfare of the worker would be rapidly improved, generating more satisfaction along middle class and most groups of our society.
In my opinion, giving a chance to the workers to have more free time willfree time, will probably result in a happier relation between employees and employers, creating a nicer environmentenviroment to produce more or continue to grow the business
Why this response received Band 5.5
The essay clearly outlines both sides of the debate and presents a clear personal opinion in the conclusion. However, the response is significantly under-length at only 172 words, which severely limits the depth of argument development and explanation. To improve, the candidate must expand on their main points with concrete examples and ensure they meet the minimum 250-word requirement.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
While a clear position is presented in the final paragraph, the ideas are only minimally explored and lack supporting examples due to the severe under-length word count.
Aim to write at least 250 words by fully explaining the 'why' and 'how' of each point and adding specific real-world examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear four-paragraph structure, but the progression of ideas feels rushed and some transitions are mechanical.
Use a wider range of linking words and ensure each body paragraph fully develops one central topic sentence before moving to the next.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is generally appropriate for the topic, though there are some awkward word choices such as 'experiment a decrease' and spelling errors like 'enviroment'.
Focus on learning natural word pairings (collocations) and practice proofreading to eliminate basic spelling mistakes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response contains several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues and frequent comma splices where full stops are needed.
Work on sentence boundary punctuation to avoid run-on sentences, and ensure singular subjects agree with singular verbs.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.