The table and pie chart illustrate populations in Australia according to different nationalities and areas.
Sample Response
The pie chart and table detail population figures in Australia and whether residents tendand if residents tended to live in rural or urban areas. OverallLooking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the vast majority of the population is Australian, followed by sizeable proportionsnumbers for people of other nationalities and British nationalsother and British nationals, and more marginal figures for New Zealanders, Chinese, and the Dutch. All nationality groupsAll demographics live overwhelmingly in cities, especially individuals from China.
The pie chart indicates that 73% of the Australian population is made up of Australian nationalsAustralians themselves. This figure is followed distantly by people of other nationalities at 14%other at 14%, residents from Great Britain at 7%, New Zealanders at 3%, Chinese at 2%, and people from the Netherlands at just 1%.
In terms of livinglivings areas, Australians are most likely to live outside cities, though 80% still live in urban environments. Similarly, 83% of the Dutch live in cities and 17% in the countryside. British and New Zealand residents display nearly identical proportions with around 90% in cities. Finally, the Chinese live predominantlypredominately in the cities (99%).
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response presents a strong overview and accurately integrates the nationality shares with the urban-rural distribution, using well-selected figures and comparisons. Its main limitation is minor imprecision in wording, especially the claim that Australians are most likely to live outside cities despite 80% being urban, alongside a few lexical slips. Refine comparative phrasing and proofread word forms to make an otherwise accomplished report fully precise.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response clearly identifies the main patterns and accurately covers nearly all figures across both visuals, with only one potentially misleading comparison.
Clarify that Australians have the highest relative countryside share among the listed nationalities while still living predominantly in cities.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically sequenced through a clear overview and two well-focused detail paragraphs, with smooth comparative progression.
Maintain this structure while making the transition into the urban-rural comparison slightly more direct.
Lexical Resource
The report uses flexible and precise data-description vocabulary, although “livings areas” and “predominately” are noticeable lexical slips.
Proofread word forms and spelling, using “living areas” and “predominantly” for full precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is handled accurately, and the few awkward formulations do not impede communication.
Refine the opening clause by using “whether residents tended to live” instead of “if residents tended to live.”
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table and pie chart illustrate populations in Australia according to different nationalities and areas.
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