The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.
Sample Response
The diagram illustrates howexplains the way in which bricks are made for the building industry. Overall, there are seven stages in the process, beginning with the excavation of claydigging up of clay and culminating in delivery. To begin, the clay used to make the bricks is dug up from the ground by a large digger. This clay is then placed ononto a metal grid, which is used to break up the clay into smaller pieces. A roller assists in this process. Following this, sand and water are added to the clay, and this mixture is turned into bricks by either placing it into a mould or using a wire cutter. Next, these bricks are placed in an drying ovenoven to dry for 24 – 48 hours. In the subsequent stage, the bricks go through a heating and cooling process. They are heated in a kiln at a moderate and then a high temperature (ranging from 200c to 1300c), followed by a cooling process in a chamber for 2 – 3 days. Finally, the bricks are packed and delivered to their destinations.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response covers the complete manufacturing sequence in a clear chronological order, and its controlled passive structures make the process easy to follow. The main limitation is reduced precision in the firing stage: the diagram gives separate moderate and high kiln ranges, while the response collapses them into one broad range. Reporting the moderate range as 200–980°C and the high range as 870–1300°C would make the account fully faithful to the visual.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview and detailed account accurately cover every stage, both shaping alternatives, and the main timings.
State the separate moderate and high kiln temperature ranges rather than combining them into one span.
Coherence and Cohesion
Sequencing is consistently logical, and cohesive markers guide the reader smoothly from clay extraction to delivery.
Divide the detailed sequence into preparation and firing paragraphs to make the stage grouping more visible.
Lexical Resource
Process vocabulary is varied and precise, including accurate terms for equipment, shaping, heating, cooling, and delivery.
Use drying oven rather than the broader oven to match the diagram's label exactly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Passive forms and complex clauses are varied, accurate, and well suited to an objective process description.
Maintain this control while presenting the two temperature ranges in a compact parallel structure.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.
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