The chart below shows the annual pay (thousands of US dollars) for doctors and other workers in seven countries in 2004.
Sample Response
The bar chart compares thecompares seven countries regarding the annual payyearly payment for doctors and other workersjobs in 2004in the year 2004.
It is clear that doctors generally earned higher salariesdoctors generally made more money than other workersother types of work in each country in 2004during the research period. Also, the average payincomes of doctors and other workers in the USAmerican doctors and other workers were the highest among the seven nations.
Doctors in the USThe US doctors earned the highest annual payearned the largest amount of money compared to those in the other six countries, receiving $120,000receiving nearly $120,000, while the figures for Switzerland and France were significantly lower, at close to $70,000 eachclose to 70,000 each. In contrast, there was only about $50,000 earned by doctors in Finland, as opposed to doctors in the other countries, who received around $61,000 each.
Regarding the average salaries of other workers, the amount of money earned by other workers in the US, at approximately $45,000 and in Switzerland, at exactly $40,000 was higher than in any of the other nations. Roughly $30,000 was given to other workers in FranceFrench other workers, about $5,000 higher than the figure for their Finnish counterpartsthat of Finnish counterparts. By contrast, the figures for the remaining countries were lowest, at exactly $20,000 each.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response gives a clear overview and selects nearly all the key comparisons, with figures that closely match the chart and a logical country-by-country structure. The main limitation is occasional awkward phrasing, particularly when referring to other workers, plus some dense sentence construction. Refine collocations and split or punctuate longer comparisons more carefully to make an already accurate report more natural and precise.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview identifies both dominant features, and the detailed figures and country groupings are comprehensive and largely accurate.
Distinguish the close values for France, Switzerland, Germany, the Czech Republic, and Italy a little more precisely.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically organised into an overview and separate doctor and other-worker comparisons, with clear progression throughout.
Reduce the density of the final paragraph by separating its two main comparison groups more cleanly.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of salary and comparison vocabulary, despite occasional awkward choices such as French other workers and money was given.
Prefer precise occupational collocations such as other workers in France and earned an annual salary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex structures is handled with generally strong control, though a few long sentences have awkward coordination or punctuation.
Check agreement and punctuation when one sentence combines figures for several countries.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the annual pay (thousands of US dollars) for doctors and other workers in seven countries in 2004.
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