The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.
Sample Response
The sales at this small restaurant during the week of October 7 to 1313th followed a fairly set pattern from Monday to Friday, and then showed a notable shiftshowed notable shift on the weekend. The lunch and dinner sales during the week peaked on Friday and then dippeddipper down as the weekend set in. During the week of October 7-1314th, the lunch sales averaged approximatelyaveraged at approximately $2,260400. The highest lunch sales occurred on WednesdayFriday, and the lowest occurred on Sunday. Sunday’s lunch sales were approximately $830 lessapproximately $1,000 less than the average lunch sales during the rest of the week. Dinner sales, which generated between about $850 and $1,850 more per dayat least $1,000 to $1,500 more a day than lunch sales, also remained steady during the week. Unlike the lunch salesJust like the lunch sales, the dinner sales peakedpeak on Friday and fell over the weekenddipped down for the weekend. Excluding Wednesday and Thursday, the lunch and dinner sales from October 7-11 rose gradually until the end of the business week. Midweek, on Wednesday and Thursday, the sales were slightly lower than they were on Tuesday. According to the sales report, this restaurant has a steady lunch and dinner crowd. The most profitable day during the second week of October was Friday. Sunday wasSunday, was the least profitable day, with the full day’s sales totallingtotaling/totalling less than the Friday dinner sales. These numbers are reflective of a restaurant that is located in a business/financial district where business hours are Monday through Friday.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response is strongest in identifying the broad weekday-to-weekend pattern and comparing lunch with dinner sales, and its language is generally clear and varied. However, several key claims conflict with the table, notably that Friday had the highest lunch sales, while some midweek comparisons and stated differences are also inaccurate. Prioritise checking every reported peak, low and comparison against the figures before adding interpretation.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A broad weekday-to-weekend pattern and the most and least profitable days are identified, but the claimed Friday lunch peak and several comparisons are inaccurate or unsupported.
Verify each claim against the table, especially the Wednesday lunch maximum, the daily lunch-dinner gaps, and the exact midweek movements.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report follows a generally understandable progression, but one long paragraph, repeated peak-and-weekend points, and shifts between observations and interpretation weaken organisation.
Use a separate overview followed by two focused detail paragraphs, grouping weekday patterns and weekend changes without repetition.
Lexical Resource
There is a reasonably varied range for describing trends and profitability, although awkward choices such as "averaged at" and "steady crowd" reduce precision.
Use precise data-reporting collocations such as "averaged", "sales figures", and "the gap between lunch and dinner revenue".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good range of complex sentences is used with generally clear control, despite occasional errors in articles, tense, punctuation, and word form.
Proofread for localised slips such as the missing article in "a notable shift", the tense in "sales peaked", and the form "dipped".
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.
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