The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.
Sample Response
The provided table gives data on the sales of a small restaurant for the week of October 7-13for the second week of October month. As is observed from the given presentation, dinner sales are higherthe sales volume of dinner is higher than lunch salesthe lunch sales volume throughout the whole week Deleteexcept Sunday and sales for both lunch and dinner are highestpeople spend more money for lunch and dinner to the restaurant on Friday. The table shows thatAs is presented in the comparison table, the restaurant's lunchtime salesthe sale amount of the restaurant in lunch time is between $2,375 and $2,595around $ 2300 to $ 2600 from Monday to Friday. Dinner salesTheir sales volume of dinner for weekdaysthe same days of the week is between $3,445 and $4,350between $3400 and $4400. But on Saturday and Sunday, sales drop compared with weekdaysa different trend is observed when the sales volume drops compared to other days of the week Deleteand this is possibly because of the days off. On Sunday the lunch salessales volume of lunch decreases to $ 1,550 and dinner to $ 2,450 which are the lowest sales figures of the weekthe least amounts they sale in the week. Interestingly the dinner sales volume on Sunday night drops to only $ 2045 which is almost 2 times less than the amount they sell on Friday night. In summary, the restaurant sales more for dinner than the lunch and people tend to eat less in restaurants on Saturday and Sunday.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response communicates the broad pattern that dinner revenue exceeded lunch revenue and that weekend sales were lower, and its weekday ranges are reasonably selected. However, several key statements conflict with the table, including the claim that Sunday was an exception, the Friday lunch peak, and two different Sunday dinner figures. Verify each daily value, remove unsupported explanations, and present one accurate overview before the details.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main lunch-dinner and weekday-weekend patterns are identified, but repeated factual errors and unsupported speculation make the report uneven.
Cross-check Friday and Sunday values and report only observable patterns, including Wednesday's lunch peak and Friday's dinner peak.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses from an overview to weekday and weekend details, but the single paragraph, repetition, and contradictory Sunday figures weaken cohesion.
Separate the overview from weekday and weekend comparisons and state each Sunday figure only once.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient vocabulary for sales and comparison, but frequent awkward collocations such as 'sales volume of dinner' and 'sales more' limit precision.
Prefer concise phrases such as 'dinner sales,' 'lunch revenue,' 'peaked at,' and 'fell to.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning remains generally clear, but recurring article, preposition, agreement, and word-form errors occur across the response.
Edit sentence by sentence for forms such as 'sales were,' 'spent at the restaurant,' and 'the lowest amounts sold.'
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.
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