The diagram shows the relationship between many different languages.
Sample Response
The provided diagram demonstrates the relationship betweenof different languagesthe different language across different regionson a different continent.
Overall, two types of English language, the American English branch and the British English branch. It is spoken in different countries and that countries also speak other languages.
For the American English branch, this branch is spoken mainlythe majority of this language spoken in two countries, the USA and Canada. Canada has two regional branches:two branches that divided by area, Anglophone Canada and Francophonefrancophone Canada. We can clearly see sevensix branches in the USA; The USA branches areUSA region is American Samoa, West Coast, Southernwest coast southern, midwest, North-East Coastnorth east coast, Puerto Rico and the last one is the Philippines.
The British English branch has six main groups:For the British English branch, six different countries have west indies, Britishness, Africa, India-Pakistan, Australia and far east. Jamaica and Barbados are the two West Indies branchesJamaica and Barbados are two regions for the west indies, whereas West Africa, East Africa and Anglophone Africa are the three African brancheswest Africa, east Africa and Angelo phone Africa is for Africa territory. In Britishness, four languages Irish, English, Welsh and Scottish, while the form of Indian English spoken in Indian-Pakistan. In Australasia, the branch comprises two countries:the territory is speaking in two countries Australia and New Zealand. However, the Far East branch contains Malay and Chinesethe far east side Malay and the Chinese language spoken.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response's strongest feature is its broad coverage of the two main English branches and many of their subsidiary groups. However, several diagram categories are inaccurately described as countries, regions, or languages, and frequent grammatical errors make some relationships difficult to follow. The highest priority is to describe the hierarchy with exact labels and complete, well-formed sentences that clearly distinguish branches from their examples.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies the two principal branches and reports many lower-level groups, but its overview is limited and several hierarchical relationships are inaccurately classified.
Use the diagram's exact category labels and summarise the main branching pattern before selecting accurate examples from each side.
Coherence and Cohesion
Separate paragraphs for the American and British branches create a sensible progression, though connections within sentences are sometimes unclear or mechanically listed.
Organise each main branch from higher-level groups to lower-level examples and use clear sentence boundaries between distinct relationships.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for identifying branches, countries, and regions, but frequent inaccurate choices and forms such as Britishness and Angelo phone reduce precision.
Copy proper labels accurately from the diagram and use consistent relational terms such as branch, variety, region, and subgroup.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors with missing verbs, articles, agreement, and clause construction occur throughout, although the main meaning is generally recoverable.
Build each description around a complete subject-verb structure, then check articles and singular-plural agreement before adding dependent clauses.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagram shows the relationship between many different languages.
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