The bar chart below shows the average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003.
Sample Response
The bar graph showselucidates information on the average price of clothingprice of buying clothes per kilometre from Argentina, Brazil, Japan, China, India and Bangladesh.
Overall, it can be asserted that Argentina was the most expensive sourceparamount in cost for importing clothes into the European Union in both years, while Bangladesh was the least expensive sourceminuscule in cost per kilometre. Also, China, India and Bangladesh increased between 1993 and 2003showed an increasing trend, whereas Argentina, Brazil and Japan decreasedArgentina and Brazil experienced a downward trend.
DeleteEssentially, in 1993, Chinachina had a price of only £10accounted for only 10 pounds in import cost per kilometre to the European Union, which rose markedlysoared prodigiously to almost 17 pounds per kilometre in 2003. Furthermore, India and Bangladesh spent approximately 7 pounds and 3 pounds on imported clothes in 1993, but the cost of imports augmented in 2003 by almost 12 and 6 pounds per kilometre, respectively.
In addition, Brazil’s figure was the same in both years atBrazil was tantamount in both years, which was approximately £23 in each yearapproximately 24 pounds each. Moreover, The import prices for Argentina and Japan wereArgentina and Japan’s import cost was approximately £28 and £15below 30 pounds and 15 pounds in 1993, respectively; however,1993 respectively, however, in 2003 their prices fell slightlythe import cost dwindled slightly by £2 for each countryby almost 2 pounds in both countries.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response covers all six countries and highlights the highest and lowest prices, while several individual figures and movements are accurately reported. The main limitation is that the overview wrongly groups Brazil among the countries that declined, contradicting the later statement that its price was unchanged. Prioritise an accurate overview, then use straightforward language to distinguish values that rose to a level from amounts of change.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main extremes and most figures are covered, but the overview incorrectly states that Brazil declined and omits Japan's fall.
Verify every overview trend against the chart and state clearly that Brazil was stable while Argentina and Japan fell.
Coherence and Cohesion
The four-paragraph structure and country groupings create broadly clear progression despite some mechanical linking and an internal contradiction.
Organise the details consistently by rising, falling, and unchanged countries so the body directly supports the overview.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient range for describing changes, but several forced choices such as paramount, minuscule, prodigiously, and tantamount are inaccurate or unnatural.
Prefer precise chart language such as highest, lowest, rose to, fell to, and remained stable.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex forms, but article, punctuation, capitalisation, and clause-construction errors recur.
Review sentence boundaries and comparative constructions, particularly clauses describing whether a value rose to or rose by an amount.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart below shows the average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003.
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