The bar chart shows the number of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in 3 years and compares with the European average.
Sample Response
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph depicts the amount of motor vehicle per thousand individuals in different European nations in 3 years.
In 1960 bus usethe usage of the bus was 20 thousand which surgedwas surge by about 7by almost 13 thousand after two decades. Whereas, After twenty years it was declined by 18 thousand which was around 17 thousand. On the other hand, the utilization of Bike was decreased after every two decades. In 1960 it was almost 27 thousand which was declined by 5 thousand, later it falls at only 7 thousand in the year of 2000 which was very low.
Furthermore, Car useConsumption of cars was almost 7 thousand in 1960, the figure rose sharply to 25a sudden increase was observed, which was 25 percent after two decades, and again after twenty years, it reached a peak of about 37it was seen at peak, which was almost 37 thousand in 2000. In 1960 people travelled on footpeople prefer foot which was 35 thousand but after twenty years it fell to around 17was declined by around 18 thousand, after another twenty yearsafter few years it fell furthera slight fall has been noticed to 10which was 10 thousand in 2000.
Overall, Bus use fluctuatedA fluctuation has been seen in the use of buses. Meanwhile, car use increased over timeWhereas, Preference for cars was increased by the time. On the other hand, Walking became less common over the periodMost people avoid using foot year by year.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the main trends for cars, bicycles, walking and buses and supports most of them with figures from the chart. Its main limitations are an inaccurate description of the visual as a comparison of countries, errors in the bus figures and units, and frequent language mistakes that reduce precision. Prioritise accurate chart framing and units, then present each transport mode in short, grammatically controlled comparisons.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main modal trends are identified and mostly supported, but the introduction misrepresents the categories and some bus data and units are inaccurate.
Describe the four transport modes accurately at the outset and check each number and unit directly against the visual.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a broadly logical mode-by-mode sequence, though the late overview and fragmentary linking make progression somewhat mechanical.
Place the overview after the introduction and replace isolated connectors such as "Whereas" with complete linked sentences.
Lexical Resource
Trend vocabulary is sufficiently varied to convey the main movements, but inaccurate collocations and imprecise labels occur frequently.
Use precise combinations such as "car use rose", "walking fell", and "bus use fluctuated" consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is generally recoverable, but frequent errors in verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries limit grammatical control.
Practise complete past-tense comparison sentences with one subject and one clearly controlled verb phrase before adding subordinate clauses.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart shows the number of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in 3 years and compares with the European average.
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