The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Sample Response
The bar chart and the table illustrate changes in export earningschanges of the exports in five export categoriesfive distinct industries in one nation between 2015 and 2016.
Overall, it can be seen that export values in most categories showedexport value in most categories witnessed an upward trend over the given period, except for the gems and jewellery categorygems and jewel industry. Additionally, export earnings fromearnings from the exports of petroleum and engineered goods were the highest.
With regardregards to petroleum products, there was a increasegradual increase in export value, from just over 60 billion to approximately 63 billion dollars between 2015 and 2016. A similar growth in value was seen in the export of engineered goods, at 8.5%.
Moreover, the remaining categories recorded lower export earnings. The amount of money earned from gems and jewellery decreased significantly by 5.18%, from around 43 billion dollars in 2015 to just above 40 billion in 2016. In contrast, the export earnings of textile products experienced a 15.24% rise to over 30 billion dollars in 2016, while the figure for agricultural products was fairly steady, at around 30 billion dollars.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response is concise, well organised, and supported by accurate figures, with a particularly effective overview of the general rise and the two leading export categories. The main limitation is that engineered goods are reported only through their percentage change, leaving a notable chart comparison underdeveloped. Add their approximate values for both years and make one direct comparison with petroleum exports.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview identifies the main trends and the selected data are accurate, but the values for engineered goods are omitted.
State that engineered goods rose from roughly 57 to 62 billion dollars and compare this increase directly with petroleum products.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has clear paragraphing, logical progression, and generally effective links between the overview and grouped details.
Strengthen the grouping further by discussing the two highest-earning categories together with both their values and percentage changes.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and appropriate for describing export values and changes, with only occasional awkward collocations.
Refine phrases such as “changes in exports” and “an increase of 8.5%” for more natural precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good range of complex sentences is used accurately, and the few article or preposition slips do not impede communication.
Proofread fixed expressions and noun phrases, particularly “with regard to” and article use before export categories.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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