The graph below shows the Gross Domestic Products (GDP) in four selected countries between 2010 and 2015.
Sample Response
The line graph compares the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) in four countries and shows how GDP changeddelineates how GDP in these countries changed between 2010 and 2015. GDP is measuredThe GDP is measured in billions of US dollarsdollar. As can be seen, the USA had the largest GDP and China's GDP growthin China, the GDP growth was remarkable. The graph showsThe diagram outlines that the USA had the highest GDP in 2010, at exactly2010 which was exactly 15,000 billion dollars15000 billion dollars. With roughly 6,000 billion USD6000 billion USD, China had the second largest GDP while Japan's GDP was close to China'sJapan almost touched the GDP of China that yearin this year. The UK had the smallestleast GDP in 2010 which was approximately 2,500somewhat 2500 billion USD. It is worth noting thatworth noticing that, GDP in the USA steadily grew and reached about 18,000reached to over 18000 billion dollars in 2015, 3,000 billion higher3000 billion higher than that of 2010. USA’s GDP was higher than any other country between 2010 and 2015. However, the GDP growth in China was most remarkable as it almost doubled in 5 years, reaching about 11,000reaching almost 12000 billion USD. As an exception, GDP in Japan actually declined while it remained almost the same in the UK in five years.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The report identifies all major trends accurately and supports them with appropriate opening and closing figures, especially the sustained US lead and China's rapid growth. Its main weakness is presentation: the whole response is one paragraph and several expressions are awkward or imprecise; prioritise dividing the overview from the details and replacing phrases such as reached to and almost touched the GDP with natural comparative language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and well-selected figures accurately cover the US lead, China's rapid rise, Japan's decline, and the UK's stability.
Add one concise comparison of Japan's 2012 peak and the UK's slight fluctuations to make the coverage still more complete.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information progresses logically from an overview to starting values and subsequent trends, but it is presented as one dense paragraph.
Separate the overview from two detail paragraphs, grouping the rising economies and the stable or declining economies.
Lexical Resource
The report uses a good range of economic and trend vocabulary, though several collocations are unnatural or imprecise.
Use natural phrases such as reached over, was close to China's figure, and approximately 2,500 billion dollars.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex structures is handled with generally good control, with only occasional article, preposition, and punctuation errors.
Proofread prepositions after trend verbs and avoid unnecessary commas after introductory reporting phrases.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the Gross Domestic Products (GDP) in four selected countries between 2010 and 2015.
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