The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992.
Sample Response
The charts provide information on the distribution of employed men and women across six broad categoriesthe proportion of males and females in employment in 6 broad categories, divided into manual and non-manual occupations. In general, a greater percentage of women work in non-manual occupations than work in manual occupations, and the reverse is true for men.
In the non-manual occupations, while a greater percentage of working women than men are found in clerical-type positions, there is a smaller percentage of women than men employed in managerial and professional positions. The percentage of women employed in other non-manual occupations is slightly larger than the corresponding figure for menthe percentage of men in these occupations.
In manual employment, the biggest difference between the two sexes is in the employment of craft workers, where males make up 24% of the workforce and females just 3%. Furthermore, the percentage of women working as general labourersworking as general working as general labourers is very small, only 1%. There is little differenceThere is not a great deal of difference between the percentage of men and women doing other manual work (26% and 27%, respectively)men doing other forms of manual work (26%) and women in other manual work (27%).
In summary, the two charts clearly show that women do not have the same access as men to certain types of employment.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response is strongest in its clear organization and accurate comparison of the main male and female employment patterns, supported by well-chosen figures. Its main limitation is that several non-manual categories are discussed without data, while the final claim about access goes beyond what the charts establish. Prioritise fuller numerical support for key comparisons and keep conclusions strictly descriptive of the visual evidence.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main patterns and several key contrasts are accurately identified, but numerical support is uneven and the final interpretation is not directly shown by the charts.
Include selected figures for the non-manual categories and replace the access claim with a factual summary of the distributions.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is sequenced logically through a clear overview and well-focused paragraphs on non-manual and manual work.
Integrate the final summary with the overview or use it to reinforce a distinct evidence-based comparison.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally precise for comparing employment categories, although one duplicated phrase disrupts an otherwise fluent account.
Proofread for accidental repetition and prefer strictly neutral wording when interpreting statistical data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex comparative structures is used accurately, with errors rare and communication consistently clear.
Maintain this control while trimming repetitive comparative phrasing for greater concision.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992.
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