The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Sample Response
The pie charts illustrate the proportionsratio of sodium, saturated fats and added sugar in four daily meal categoriesfour average daily meals consumed by Americans. The percentages of these three nutrients in breakfast, lunch, dinner and snacks that American citizens generally consume are given and they are detrimental for health if consumed plenty in quantity. Overall, dinners and lunches that US residentsthe USA residents consume are sodium and rich in saturated fatsaturated fats rich while their snacks have a high proportionportion of added sugar. In detaildetails, USA citizens' intake of sodium, added sugar and saturated fatsodium, sugar and saturated fats intake at breakfastduring the breakfast is comparatively lower, between 14% and 16% in each chartaround 14-16% each time. Intake of these nutrients is considerably higher in meals eaten at lunch and dinnerfood items they eat during lunch and dinner. The lunch they eat comprisescomprises of 29% sodium and 26% saturated fat29% sodium, 26% saturated fats and 19% added sugarnearly 20% sugar. They consume much higher percentages of these nutrients, which are harmful to health when eaten too much, while they heave their dinner. Their intake of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar at dinnersaturated fats and sugar during dinner are 43%, 37% and 23% respectively. Finally, the snacks they enjoy contain high proportions of added sugar and saturated fatcontain high sugar and fats, 42% and 21%, respectively, and the proportion of added sugar in snacksthe sugar intake in snacks is higher than those at dinner and lunchthat of dinner and lunch.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response gives a clear overview and reports nearly all major figures accurately, with especially effective coverage of lunch and dinner. Its main weakness is recurring awkward or inaccurate phrasing, while the data description also omits the 14% sodium share for snacks and overstates their fat content. Prioritise precise comparisons and more natural grammatical constructions so the accurate visual reading is expressed consistently.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and mostly accurate figures cover the main patterns, but snack sodium is omitted and its saturated-fat level is overstated.
Include the missing 14% sodium figure for snacks and compare each nutrient only where the chart supports the claim.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the overview to breakfast, lunch, dinner, and snacks, although some linking is mechanical.
Group the details by the strongest nutrient patterns and use smoother transitions than formulaic phrases such as “In details”.
Lexical Resource
The response uses relevant nutrient vocabulary, but frequent collocational problems such as “consumed plenty in quantity” and “comprises of” reduce precision.
Use standard data-reporting combinations such as “accounts for,” “is consumed in,” and “is rich in” accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the comparisons, but article, agreement, and preposition errors recur throughout.
Check subject-verb agreement and article use, especially in phrases describing intake at breakfast, lunch, and dinner.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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