The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Sample Response
The given pie charts provide information about the average proportions in four typical meals of three different kinds of nutrients (sodium, saturated fat and added sugarSodium, Saturated fats, and Added sugars), the overconsumption of which can have harmfulpernicious effects on health.
Overall, it is evident that while the levels of sodium and saturated fat in dinner are the highest, breakfast has the joint-lowest sodium share and the lowest saturated-fat sharethe opposite is true for breakfast. Meanwhile, snacks account forsnack contains the highest proportion of added sugar amongst the four examined meals.
According to the charts, dinner and lunch have the largest proportions of both sodium (43% for dinner and 29% for lunch) and saturated fat (37% for dinner and 26% for lunch). In contrast, the shares of added sugar attributed to dinner and lunchfigures for added sugar in an average meal for dinner and lunch are much lower, with 23% and 19% respectively.
With regardregards to snack and breakfast, they are both made up of 14% sodium. As for saturated fatfats, the average percentage in snack is 21%, slightly higher than that in breakfast, at 16%. In terms of added sugars, a considerable disparity can be seen in the figures for snackssnack and breakfast, with 42% for the former and only 16% for the latter.
Why this response received Band 8.5
The response gives a complete, accurate account of the three charts, supported by a sharply focused overview and well-selected comparisons across all four meals. Organisation, vocabulary, and grammar are consistently strong, with only very minor phrasing issues; the highest-priority refinement is to describe the meal categories more naturally and keep terminology such as 'snacks' and nutrient names fully consistent.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview identifies all major patterns, and the detailed paragraphs accurately report and compare every percentage shown in the charts.
Preserve this comprehensive selection while making explicit that the percentages show the distribution of each nutrient across meals.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically from overview to two well-grouped detail paragraphs, with clear referencing and cohesive comparison.
Refine the paragraph openings so they foreground the comparison being made rather than relying on routine linking phrases.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is wide, precise, and flexible, with effective language for proportions, contrast, and substantial differences.
Use the chart label 'snacks' consistently and prefer the standard phrase 'with regard to' for maximum naturalness.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is handled accurately, and the few minor phrasing lapses do not affect clarity.
Check agreement when meal labels act as categories, using plural forms such as 'snacks contain' where appropriate.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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