The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010.
Sample Response
The given bar chart presents data about the proportionpercentages of renewable energy with regardregards to the total energy supplyproduction in four countriesfour different countries (Australia, Sweden, Iceland and Turkey) in three years: 1997, 2000 and 2010three years; 1997, 2000 and 2010.
Overall, Sweden and Iceland witnessed an upward trend in the use of renewable energy sources in the three examined years. It can also be seen that among the four countries, renewable energythis type of energy was accounted for the largest share in Icelandmost popular in Iceland.
In 1997, approximately 46%almost half of the total energy produced in Iceland came from renewable resources. This figure rose steadilycontinued to climb steadily to 60% in 2000 and about 70%more than 70% in 2010. Meanwhile, in 1997, only approximately 6% of the total energy supplyapproximately 5% of the entire amount of energy produced was generated from renewablenatural resources in Sweden, who experienced a similar trend to that of Iceland with regard to the proportionin regards to proportion of renewable energy produced.
Regarding Australia, approximately 9%nearly 10% of the energy supply was from renewable resources in 1997, and this figure decreased slightly to around 5% in 2010. Similarly, the percentage of renewable energy used in Turkey experienced a decline over the years from approximately 3837% in 1997 down to just under 35% in 2010.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response is strongest in its clear organisation, effective overview, and accurate identification of Iceland as the leading country while Sweden and Iceland rise. The main limitation is incomplete selection of intermediate values and an oversimplified account of Turkey, which rises in 2000 before falling. Add the missing comparisons and use consistently precise terms for renewable energy shares.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview identifies the dominant country and two upward trends, and most figures are accurate, but several 2000 values are omitted and Turkey’s temporary rise is missed.
Include the key intermediate comparisons, especially Turkey’s increase from 1997 to 2000 before its decline, and quantify Sweden’s growth more fully.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically divided into an overview and two well-focused detail paragraphs, with clear progression and generally effective referencing.
Strengthen comparison across countries by explicitly linking similar and contrasting patterns within each detail paragraph.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of appropriate academic and trend vocabulary, though popular, natural resources, and some repeated phrasing are not fully precise.
Use the exact term renewable energy throughout and choose comparison language that describes proportions rather than popularity.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A varied range of complex sentences is generally accurate and easy to follow, with only occasional punctuation, article, and relative-pronoun errors.
Refine accuracy by using which for countries in non-defining clauses and checking punctuation around lists and introductory phrases.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010.
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