The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics.
Sample Response
The table illustrates that, according to US figures, the number of the economic and social index in four different nations in the year 1994.
Overall, it is immediately apparent from the graph that the annual income of Japanese natives had maximum pay rates in US dollars instead of others, but Peru and Zaire had the least annual income per person in US dollars.
In detail, according to the index, Japan recorded the highest annual income per personCanada gave maximum annual income per person, at US$15,760with shares at 15760. Similarly, Canada's annual income per person was US$11,100Canada also followed a positive trend with the lowest pay annual salary per person, which was US$4,660 lower than Japan'swhich accounted for 48600 lesser than Japan. Moreover, life expectancy at birth was similar in Canada and Japanwas slightly similar between Canada and Japan, at 76 and 78 years, respectively, compared with 51 years in Peruwith shares at almost 78 and 50 in Peru in the year 1994. Whereas the ratio of annual income per person captured had the lowest income at 100 in Peru, in the case of Zaire, this number plummeted by US$30.
Furthermore, according to the UN statisticsaccording to US statistics, Canada had the highest daily calorie supply per personthe barometer of individuals from Canada consumed more daily calories than others at 3,326 calories per personwith shares 3326, and this figure was 480 lower in Japanthis value got declined by 520 in Japan in the year 1994. However, the daily calories supply per person in Peru and Zaire had different figuresa different numbers, recorded at 1,927 and 1,749, respectivelywhich were recorded in 1927 and 1749. The table also shows thatIt is interesting to note that Canada and Japan had the same adult literacy rate at 99%, but the rates were 68% in Peru and 34% in ZairePeru’s percentage got plunged by 28% and 75% in Zaire.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response covers all four indicators and uses paragraphing to separate the overview from details. However, the overview is too narrow and several comparisons or figures are inaccurate, especially the contradictory income reporting and literacy data, while frequent awkward phrasing reduces clarity. Prioritize checking every figure against the table and expressing each comparison in simple, precise language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies some broad income contrasts and covers all four indicators, but the overview is limited and several figures and comparisons are inaccurate or contradictory.
Verify each value against the table and give an overview contrasting Canada and Japan's generally stronger indicators with Peru and Zaire's lower results.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is divided into recognizable paragraphs and follows the table's indicators, though progression is weakened by abrupt or illogical links and a sentence fragment.
Organize each detail paragraph around one clear comparison and use linking words only where the relationship between sentences is explicit.
Lexical Resource
There is some range in vocabulary, but frequent inappropriate choices and collocations such as 'shares,' 'barometer,' and 'got plunged' make descriptions imprecise.
Use standard Task 1 language such as 'stood at,' 'was higher than,' and 'fell to' instead of forced synonyms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms is attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, clause construction, and comparative structures regularly reduce accuracy.
Build shorter complete sentences and check subject-verb agreement and comparative forms before adding complex clauses.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics.
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