The table below shows the results of a survey to find out what members of a city sports club think about the club’s activities, facilities, and opening hours.
Sample Response
The table illustrates the satisfactionpreference levels of male and female members of a sportssport club about the club's activitiestheir activities, facilities and opening hours. It is clear that a greater proportion of male members are satisfied withthe greater proportion of male members is contented about the club’s activities (9591%) whereas the corresponding figure was onlythis figure is true only for 70% of female members.
Moreover, more than 85% of both male and female members areboth male and female are satisfied with the facilitieshappy about the facilities and 63% of male members and 64% of female members64% female members are very satisfied with the facilitiesextremely satisfied in this regard. In fact, only 14% of female members and 10% of male members were not satisfied with the facilitiesare negative about this.
Turning to opening hoursIn addition, women were most satisfied with the opening hoursopening hours are in the best interest of women as 97% of them are satisfied with thempositive about it. In contrast, more than one third of men have expressed their dissatisfaction in this regard.
In conclusion, it is clear that male and female members hold different opinionsopinion about the activities, facilities, and opening hoursthe activities and facilities and opening hours of the club.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response selects relevant figures for all three survey areas and makes useful comparisons between male and female members. Its main limitation is that the overview does not clearly synthesize the contrasting patterns, and the reported 91% satisfaction figure for men's views of activities is inaccurate. Prioritize a precise overview that highlights the similarity in facilities alongside the opposite gender preferences for activities and opening hours.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response covers all three categories with relevant comparisons, but its overview is vague and the men's activities total should be 95%, not 91%.
State the main cross-category patterns clearly in the overview and verify every combined percentage against the table.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically by survey category, and paragraphing makes the comparisons easy to follow.
Replace the repetitive conclusion with a focused overview that connects the most important similarities and contrasts.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for the task, although phrases such as 'preference levels' and 'in the best interest of women' are imprecise.
Use neutral data-reporting language such as 'satisfaction levels' and 'were satisfied with the opening hours'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentences is generally controlled, with only occasional agreement and noun-phrase errors.
Check plural forms and percentage constructions, especially 'male and female members', '64% of female members', and 'different opinions'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows the results of a survey to find out what members of a city sports club think about the club’s activities, facilities, and opening hours.
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