The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007
Sample Response
The bar chart illustrates the number of hours per week that teenagers in Chester spent on seven different activitiesdevoted to seven different activities between 2002 and 2007.
Overall, television viewing, shopping, and going to pubs or discosOverall, television viewing, shopping and going to pubs or discos became more popular over the period, while homework, sport and bowling saw a decline in the hours dedicated to them. Watching DVDs followed a different pattern, rising for several years before falling back towards the end.
Television was consistently the most time-consuming activity, with weekly hours staying at 25 in 2002 and 2003 before rising to 38 in 2007.climbing steadily from 25 in 2002 to 38 in 2007. Going to pubs and discos remained steady at 12 hours between 2004 and 2006remained fairly stable at around 12 hours between 2003 and 2006 before increasing sharply to 18 hours in the final year. Shopping showed a similar upward trend, rising from 7 hours in 2002 to 11 in 2003, peaking at 15 hours in 2006 and 2007.from just 7 hours in 2002 to a peak of 15 hours in 2006 and 2007.
By contrast, homework hours fell gradually from around 13 to 7fell gradually from 14 to 7 over the six years, and time spent on sport dropped even more significantlymarkedly, from around 10 hours to only 2 by 2007. Bowling, already a minor activity, decreased slightly from 4 to 1 hour.1 hour. Watching DVDs was the exception to these broad trends, increasing from 11 hours in 2002 to a high of 18 hours in 2004, before falling to 10 hours by 2007.gradually falling to 12 hours by 2007.
Why this response received Band 8.5
This is an exceptionally strong response that expertly highlights overall trends and supports them with precise numerical details. Data grouping is logical, transition signals are seamless, and the grammatical structures are sophisticated and error-free throughout. To reach perfection, double-check minor visual figures to ensure total data accuracy across all reported points.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents a clear, comprehensive overview and accurately compares key trends across all seven activities.
Verify final-year figure details closely to avoid minor numerical slips, such as misreading the final DVD figure as 12 instead of 10.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically organized into well-structured paragraphs grouped by general upward and downward trends.
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Lexical Resource
A wide range of precise, natural vocabulary is used fluently to describe data trends and changes over time.
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Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammar and punctuation are controlled seamlessly with a wide variety of accurate complex sentence patterns.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007
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