The graph below shows the weekday volume of passenger activity on the Toronto Metro system for July 2007.
Sample Response
The graph shows information about passenger activitythe passenger activity on the Toronto Metro systemToronto metro systems on weekdays in July 2007for a week in July 2007. The x-axis of the graph shows different hours of the day while the y-axis gives the number of passengers in thousands.
According to the given data, the metro service startsthe metro systems start at 6 in the morning with 100,000 passengers100 thousand people. As the morning progressedAs the day moved forward, passenger numbers rose rapidlythe numbers increased rapidly and at 8 o'clockaround 8’o clock in the morning, they reached a peakit went up to the peak of 400 thousand people, and the number then fell to about 200,000 by 10:00 a.m.the volume decreased at 10:00 am from 400 to 200 thousand people.
ThereafterMoving ahead, passenger numbers rose around middayit went up to in the middle of the day and remained broadly stablemaintained the same number until 2:00 p.m. at around 300,000 passengerstill 2:00 pm in the afternoon around 300 thousand people then passenger numbers fellthen it is going down in number to the same level as at 6 a.m.as same as 6 in the morning and when the evening starts the number skyrocketed and moves to near about 400 thousand people at 6 in the evening and after that it generally declinedafter that it going down and down till ten at night.
Overall, the peak of the subway system is 8 in the morning and 6 in the evening. At the same time, the x-axis of the graph went down at the start of the day in the middle of the day, around 4:00 pm in the evening.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the principal morning and evening peaks and includes several broadly accurate time-and-volume figures. However, it oversimplifies the midday and evening movements, incorrectly suggests a continuous fall after 6 p.m., and sometimes describes the axis rather than passenger numbers. Prioritise tracing the line interval by interval, including the 9 p.m. rebound, while dividing long descriptions into controlled grammatical sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The two main peaks and several key values are identified, but important fluctuations are omitted or inaccurately generalised.
Report the 4 p.m. low and the fall-rise-fall pattern between 6 p.m. and 10 p.m. with accurate approximate values.
Coherence and Cohesion
The four-part structure gives a basic progression, but the long third paragraph and repetitive sequencing weaken clarity.
Organise the details into morning-to-afternoon and late-afternoon-to-night periods using shorter, clearly connected sentences.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to describe basic changes, but repetition and imprecise expressions frequently reduce statistical clarity.
Replace phrases such as going down and down, moved forward, and the x-axis went down with precise trend verbs and nouns.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent tense shifts, agreement errors, missing words, and run-on coordination reduce control, although the main meaning remains recoverable.
Keep descriptions consistently in the past tense and split the extended third-paragraph sentence into several complete clauses.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the weekday volume of passenger activity on the Toronto Metro system for July 2007.
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