The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion.
Sample Response
The pie chart shows the UAE government’s expenditurebudget spending in different sectors in 2000. As shownAs is presented, the UAE government had a budget of AED 315 billionAED 135 billion budget for the year 2000 and it allocated the largest amount to social securitythey used the highest amount for ensuring social security. According to the pie chart, the UAE administration allocated AED 100 billion toin social security from their totalnational budget of AED 315 billion. This single sector cost the UAE government almost one-third of the total budget. In 2000This year the government's expenditure was AED 53 billionexpense was 53 million on health and personal social services, which was the second-largest expenditure categorythe second largest sector in terms of expenditure made by the UAE government. AED 38 billion38 million AED was spent on education while AED 23 billion went to each of debt interest and other expenditurewhile 23 billion both in debt and other expenditures. The government used 22 billion on the defence sectorin Defence sector and AED 13 billion went towhile 13 billion for the industry, employment and agriculture sectors. The lowest amount of money, only 9 billion, went to the transport sector. Finally, 15 billion of the budget was spent on housing and environment. In summary, UAE government's maximum spending went toin social security and healthcare sectors while the least amounts were spent on transport, law and order, housing and industry/agriculture and employment sectors.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies social security as the largest allocation and covers nearly all spending categories, using a clear sequence from major to minor items. However, it gives an incorrect total early on, uses millions instead of billions for two figures, and offers an imprecise overview of the smallest sectors. Prioritise checking every unit and value against the chart before summarising the main contrasts.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and broad category coverage are weakened by an incorrect total, two wrong units, and imprecise treatment of the smallest allocations.
Verify every figure and unit, then summarise the largest and smallest allocations without grouping mid-range categories among the lowest.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the dominant allocation to smaller sectors, but the single-paragraph presentation limits structural clarity.
Separate the overview from two grouped detail paragraphs, organising categories by larger and smaller allocations.
Lexical Resource
The response uses an adequate range of spending-related vocabulary, though repetition and awkward collocations reduce precision.
Use more natural combinations such as allocated to, expenditure on, and accounted for while avoiding repeated references to the government.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures conveys meaning clearly, but article, preposition, agreement, and incomplete-clause errors recur.
Proofread sentence structures carefully, especially articles and the verbs needed when comparing expenditure across categories.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion.
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