The graph shows the percentage of the population living in urban areas on different continents.
Sample Response
The provided bar charts reveal six different continents, Europe, Africa, South America, the world, Asia and North America’s percentage urban areal population in 2003 and forecast for 2030.
Overall, Europe, South America and North America had a major percentage citizen while will increase slightly in 2030 additionally, another continent popular also rise.
In 2003, the highest proportion was in North America, where four-fifths of people lived in citiesthe highest percentage four-fifth percentage of North American lived in the city while half that proportion of Africans lived in urban areashalf of that percentage of African lived, which was the lowest proportion at that timethat was also the least proportion that time. World and Asia had approximately 48% and 44% urban populationsurban areas population respectively.respectively.. 8% less than North America percentage citizen lived in Europe and just more 3% European people lived in South America.
In 2030, it is predictedit predicted that the world's figure will rise by just over ten percentage points and Europe's by about fiveabove just tenth percentage will jump up in world and Europe ; however,however, the urban population figures for Africa and AsiaAfrica and Asia population percentage Deletein the countryside will be similarwill same at around half of their populationson account of half proportion. South America will have the highest proportion, at roughly 84%a peak percentage of roughly 83% and about 83% of North Americans82% of North American people will live in the city.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response’s strongest feature is its attempt to organise the data by year and include figures for all six geographical categories. However, the overview is vague, several comparisons are inaccurate or unclear, and frequent grammatical and lexical errors often obstruct meaning. The highest priority is to use short, accurate comparative sentences that state each region’s urban percentage and change directly.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response addresses both years and reports several approximate figures, but the overview lacks a clear overall pattern and some comparisons misrepresent the chart.
State that every category is projected to rise, identify the highest and lowest figures, and check each reported comparison against the chart.
Coherence and Cohesion
The year-based paragraph structure provides basic progression, although faulty linking and overloaded sentences make relationships difficult to follow.
Use one clear comparison per sentence and connect ideas with simple, accurate devices such as “whereas” and “by contrast.”
Lexical Resource
There is some relevant chart vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices repeatedly obscure the intended comparisons.
Use dependable phrases such as “the proportion of people living in urban areas” and avoid substitutions like “percentage citizen” or “continent popular.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some simple structures communicate data, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, sentence construction, and verb forms often impede clarity.
Build each data statement around a complete subject and verb, then check agreement and tense before adding comparisons.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph shows the percentage of the population living in urban areas on different continents.
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